Will You Save Me?

Will You Save Me?

I am at the crash scene;

mangled wreckage,

carnage,

a human tragedy.

Vehicles so distorted,

so broken,

impact damaged and tossed like leaves.

Amidst the tangle lies the true cost,

broken people,

smashed bodies,

trapped limbs

and lives extinguished.

A sole survivor, crushed within,

still has a pulse.

Do you have the skills,

are you brave enough to reach in,

can you preserve that life;

will you save me?

 

6^th June 2010

 

Reviews

[X]

This is so awesome. You set the stage so well with the physical trauma that a car wreck provides and use it as a great juxtaposition to your own "car wreck" internally of heartbreak. One of my favorites of yours John

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you X. I just re read this poem and it made me cry.

[X]

I can imagine.

[KAOlmsted]

I worked hard at finding the metaphor, but gave up when I decided you were in a terrible road accident and then decided to write about it...or it's about a failed relationship...or a road accident...I don't know. Either way, it's a powerful piece full of disturbing imagery...I loved it.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

It is soley about the disaster of failed relationships which wreck lives. Thank you Kimmer

[Kajal Gulabani]

Very different from the rest of your work.. Immensely empathetic. Grave!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks

[Frieda P]

Extremely, deep mind pondering read. Goes to my point of 'apathy' will you stick your neck out for me, or just pretend it never happened... Much food for thought here. Thanks for this John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Frieda

[DIVYA]

This is different from your ususal writing and as good. A moving question, an appeal for vital help, first aid, at a time so crucial. Yet most of us instinctively try to veer off clear from such gruesome accident scenes. Very thoughtful and moving.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I guess it has got skewed somehow as my usyal poetry has no sexual content. I have pages on here. Glad you liked it Divya Thank you.

[Claire Twinn]

A very powerful description and metaphor.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Claire

[Leslie Philibert]

And there you go ! John can write fine poetry about a lot of things...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Leslie

[quinfinn]

wow, i don't think i have ever read any poem quite like this one. it examines the carnage and wreckage of a terrible accident and begs the question....will you risk your own safety to respect and save that one remaining life? this is truly thought provoking and very (pardon the expression) impactful. terrific write!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I think life sometimes equates to a road traffic accident hence the metaphor use. Many thanks again QF.

[quinfinn]

well, my life, if in question, certainly has had its share of carnage and damage...i hadn't equated with this,,,thanks for the insight

[Irene]

very nice :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Irene

[Patricia B. Hepler]

Quick lines that are full of pain, fear & hope~ Brief but telling. Good work, pat

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Pat