They

They

I don’t feel like writing poetry,

there is no prose in my heart,

no lyrics in my head.

Only the emptiness,

the gaping hole of loneliness

that they have left me.

In this space dwells defeat;

a monster made of hate,

born of hurt and deep, deep anger,

who will rage against such tyranny.

The cruelty they have shown

cuts deep, leaves vicious scars.

For theirs is the diet of deceit;

They feed upon the immorality,

the duplicity, guile and falseness

of pretence.

They offer love and utter empty promises

and when tested flee

to their chosen sanctuary.

No honour and no faith,

only hollow and superficial words

Sung beguilingly to lure me to my doom.

Mere hypnotic traps that spill from insincere lips

and leave me clinging, helpless,

abandoned upon the storm ravaged rocks of life.

So beware, do not be lured by their affiance,

do not commit your soul,

for such half-women are they.

 

21^st April 2010

Reviews

[Shelley Holt-Lowrey]

Pain felt here... but I must say it is nice to read the other half of what I so often write on. I often represent the perspective of the femal who is the the recipients of insincerity - and get called out on it often. Next time, I think I may send them here - so they know that we all feel - gender notwithstanding - and we write often from the viewpoint of our own experience. How can we not? This is tragically beautiful and well done.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A life time full of them actually. But hey ho it still has not ground me down and I still try to get back on the horse. Anyway thanks Shelley for such a considered review.

[Yheela]

We all have to deal with "them", very well written.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Noble savage!

[Yheela]

lol

[Persephone]

I relate - great poem - 'they" can be different people for anyone, the ones who create our fear and hold us back - thanks for sharing :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You are a sensitve woman. Thank you for seeing the bredth in this piece!

[Junert]

Sad but nice.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Junert, I was sad at the time and a tad angry.

[Eloha]

Rarely have I ever read such an effective rant against the callow sharpness of them vultures! I kid.

An interesting spin, so often it's the other way around, got to make you smile!

What kind of women have you been dating recently John?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Lately I was with someone for two years. She had debts of £236,000 and her job is unstable and I had to bail her out last year when she was out of work for five months. Cost me a pile of money. But the key issue is that I am solvent, free and have my own home but she insists that I accept coming into her life sell my house, buy her a £5,000 ring, look after her dog and give up my childrens space when they come home. etc

[Eloha]

That's intense, well and demanding, but sometimes we find happiness in inequality. Certainly we can love and learn even in the most bizarre of circumstances...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I am a very down to earth person. Sun, peace, beer, poetry and a loving relationship. I like equality it feels better and more fulfilling.

[Irene]

sure sounds like poetry to me. that was beautiful. I love the way you mould your words.

[Pól]

John-Your are a consumate lier. To say that there is no prose in your heart or lyrics in your head is the complete falsehood. Your words encapsulate emotions so brilliantly. thank you so much for sharing.
Slán, P

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A perpetrator of terminological inexactitudes don't you mean? Many thanks Paulo!

[Pól]

Thats easy for u to say!! Great work

[Lisa Ring]

Get out of my head. :) It is not half-women that kill my spirit, it is empty men who suck my soul to feed their own ego. Aren't we so temperamental? ;)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Well Lisa firstly it is a great relief to 90% of the men on the site that half-women don't kill your spirit. Yes we are temramental and I don't suck souls!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Temperamental!

[Lisa Ring]

;) Nice to know that you are not a soul-sucker. And I try to keep my two halves firmly together.

[spiritwind]

Next time try not to hold back. Sorry, I had to get that friviolity out of my system. Probably a reaction to the intensity here. Just who is the siren here--those half-naked sirens luring the sailors to their doom or you? You really had me mesmerized there with your "diet of deceit" and "gaping hole of loneliness" and "rage against such tyranny" You can really put the words together in powerful combinations. Good work.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you. I think holding back has a lot to be said for it!

[Lost in Wonderland]

Wow! Intense piece! I liked it a lot!
God bless

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Glad you liked it! Thank you.

[Lost in Wonderland]

no problem