You Cannot See Me

You Cannot See Me

I was long lost;

searching to be seen.

You found me,

 entreated my attention,

and I came to cherish you

 heart and body and soul.

I begged for the mercy of your love

but that was something hurt just couldn’t give;

For you had, you said,

loved him once upon a time,

and that such love would never be for me.

The frailty of justice is hard to know

when we both felt us to be so special.

We were dedicated lovers who stood side by side;

such a natural union I thought it truly made.

But past love had you grounded in despair

and, blinded by its wretched pain,

you cannot see me.

 

 

19^th August 2010

Reviews

[emmajoy]

There's such a sadness in these words. To be invited into loving then to have it voided by the past and one's presence diminished is so painful. A poet's emotions displayed here, whether or not fact. To feel invisible is .. a nothingness. Your words however, are anything but.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Emma. All true emotions sad to say but on the up side food for my poetry! lol

[emmajoy]

Tis said a true poet has to have his or her heart broken once or more.. if that's the case will stick to scribbling - my heart's too small and fragile to cope with with hurt more than once. :)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Excellent John.........the only change I would make is perhaps a few less you's?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Neva. Have tried to eliminate the ones that don't provide emphasis. And I had the title mixed up. Too much late night work in The Cafe!!!

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

I understand, the main one I would look at is heart and body and soul. you can use heart, body and soul :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Where does one get a coffee round here? And the waitress must have a night off! The added 'and' is to slow the piece down and emphasise the completeness of his love and his exasperation.

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

gotcha, here take a drink of mine, it has Amaretto Creamer :) Tastes good doesn't it?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Mmmmmmmm..Yummy! So how long have you worked here? oh! and can I have a doughnut please?

[Neva Flores Smith - Changefulstorm]

xoxooxxo