She's Apples

In Australia and New Zealand a term meaning 'nice'

She’s Apples

I seek to test the safety

and security of your heart.

I see you apples and spice

and think I may be losing my mind

as I drift carelessly

back to love.

I have burned in hell’s fires,

soaked in the accelerant

scorn of women past,

and I have hidden

beneath the cloak of anger and hurt

afraid to take a breath

lest I suffocate in the vile vomit

spewed from those diseased souls.

But you come in gentle strokes,

offer me redemption,

lay yourself bare and open

to every desire I own;

your voluptuous generosity

making my mortal flesh

weak with dripping salivation.

So, so apples and rice

that I cannot resist

such warm temptation.

04/05/13

Reviews

[Mark]

were you always this prolific? LOL I think I have about a dozen read requests from you lately (please don't think I'm complaining, just acknowledging)

I think you lay yourself bare with this one, fears, desires, expectations and surprised realization. I see a lot in this poem. Another good one!!!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Sorry Mark. I think they have built up over the past couple of months. I write when I feel. Never to write. Unfortunately I have become acustomed to write my emotions down and am an emotional person. Many thanks. I actulally forget what I have written lol

[Rhianne Ney]

This is a great poem and I think it's written nicely as always, ~ Great job, Sir McFayden

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank yo Rhianne

[Rhianne Ney]

You're welcome

[Leslie Philibert]

I love borrowings or local forms of English, so I was sold on this right away !...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thank yous for so many reviews this morn. You must be a patient man!

[quinfinn]

an apple for teacher? indeed! and by all means eat your rice.....millions of chinese can't be wong! wonderful verse, john....

[John Alexander McFadyen]

But this is an antipodean stimulated piece lol!

[quinfinn]

oh, so solly....still belly, belly good....

[John Alexander McFadyen]

So....a chink in your armour then Quin?

[quinfinn]

nah, they barely nipped me

[A. H. Pinley]

Apples and rice? An apple a day keeps the doctor away. Great use of words!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks AHP and with this particular apple there will be no doctor needed!

[Claire Twinn]

Apples and rice and all things nice indeed! I also like the cockney phrase peaches- so juicy! The apples analogy works well though because of course, like love, they can be sweet or sour.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

True Claire, very true. Many thanks.

[Junert]

That's nice, thanks for the education.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Junert.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i have apples and rice in my life now...i relate to this...

skeptical and holding back, always retreating...i went ahead and took a bite.

no eve this time..the temptation was there...but when i let it happen...it's a good thing.

but many times that bite has led to more pain...

good poem my friend.

jacob

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Glad to hear she's apples Jacob. It is a rare find. Often the fruit we pick is inedible or unripe or even overripe, so when the fruit is just right we know from previous experience that it is.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it is rare, and thank you ...

i have picked inedible, unripe and overripe fruit too many times...about time to pick good one...i was lucky to find her.

[ms. barrie]

Very honest, eloquent poem, conveying such sensuous, yet the true sweetness, of how one's heart is filled with intense love, yet realizing being so leaves one vulnerable. brilliantly, gorgeous write, Mr. McFadyen...thanks for sharing! 100 to 100 :) - Pen on!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Barrie you are so very generous.

[ms. barrie]

you're very welcome, John, was a pleasure to read :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Warm without being cross, a most talented piece, well done, good read.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thank yous Thomas