Mind Web

Sitting here in this cold, cold place

This vast, unending, winding, foggy place

Imprisoned in the darkness

That becomes my medicine

Thoughts of cryptic codes uncrackable

Deep in the inner most crevices

Of the mind, the mind, the mind

Who is able to untangle this web?

This mind web

At times I sit alone in a dark corner

Haunted by decrepit memories

Of a childhood filled with anguish

Sometimes I hear my mind breaking

The crack growing and growing

Every abysmal contemplation

Mounting to be shoddier and shoddier

Until all my thoughts are tangled

And twisted and distorted

Forever entangled in my….my

Mind’s Web

Reviews

[Charlotte Noir]

I like the way you expressed your feelings and confusion, combined with the presence of darkness over the poem. I feel that I can understand the "web" of thoughts, how you put it, and even sometimes relate to it. It is a really great poem and I enjoyed it very much:)

[April Mitchell]

Thank you!Glad you liked it!

[Rocans]

The title ensnared me within its own web and held me in place until the end. I like anything and everything about the mind, so it is hard for me to not love something like this. A lot of great lines were in this one, notably "Sometimes I hear my mind breaking
The crack growing and growing
Every abysmal contemplation
Mounting to be shoddier and shoddier"
It gives a sense of falling deeper into the trappings of the mind and into the problems of life that can easily overwhelm a person. Great stuff

[April Mitchell]

Well i am glad you enjoyed it!Thanks for the kind review!:-)

[Wolfwind]

You certainly have captured the essence of a mind that has been caged, confused and obsurved by the webs of emotions and life.

I found that the lines were you made certain words or word phrases repeat took away from the flow and the energy of the writing. I felt that if they had simply been used once, it would have assisted with keeping the deeper and more musing nature of the piece carry through with higher intensity.

I liked how the overall piece created an image that was one part very relatable emotions like rooms we all walk in, as the same time the words offered us an image that might work for a haunted room of a halloween tale. That blend of different vision made the piece more interesting to read.

Overall, I enjoyed the ink. It made me take a walk back down my own memory lane and remember those times were I could relate. Nicely done!

Aaron- Wolfwind

[April Mitchell]

Thanks for the review and the critique!I repeated words because this one is more on the lines of spoken word!