Surfacing

I swim just below the surface
Not too far down
Just far enough
No one notices
I hide here coming up for air
When
Whenever
My lungs feel full and bursting
The tide
Comes and sweeps me away
From the world
In which
I feel
Alien

Once I walked upon Earth in Sunlight
It shone around me like a halo
bright and brilliant
Golden
I could breathe free
I could feel, touch, smell
The world was azure
Lavender tinted

I fell down into an
Abyss
I was struck by
Darkness
The Darkness envelpoed me in its cloak of electric
Black velvet

I longed for the darkness and the embrace
As I waited beneath a
Blood red
Moon
I could again touch, smell, feel,
the Darkness bruised my face

Darkness
When did I fall under your spell that I could not dispel

As the Darkness faded
The Water invited me soft and salty
Like a Teardrop
I swim here
Just under the surface
I need to
I should come up for
Air
The Water is withering ,
withering me away
away

Away like a little boys lost kite
Flown into the Sky
Not gone , perhaps,
Perhaps lost in transition

I think the sky is falling
There is no place to hide
Unless the Water can protect me from its blow
Maybe it can
Maybe it can do this

Go back to sleep
Swimming so deep
Against the
Tide
Which is no
No Prince at all
Yet it still takes my breath away

Reviews

[Gandré]

The Water invited me soft and salty
Like a Teardrop
I swim here
Just under the surface
I need to
I should come up for
Air
The Water is withering ,
withering me away
away------------------------ this was my favorite part. I really liked how you describe the feeling from going from one anxiety into another one. Being thirsty and withered.. is a strong impression... This was wonderfully done, my dear Chloe. The feeling of losing against a wish a situation, against a loss. I loved this.

[Emily B]

I think I feel these words these days. I understand the darkness and living below the surface. Glad you featured it.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is beautiful. The description was amazing in your words. So many strong lines made poem a pleasure to read. Life seem hard. Swimming against the tide leave us struggling to go forward. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

i got no flow i just write the words that pop into my head

[Aria]

I liked this. The flow was erratic but it made sense for this piece. Water runs smoothly on the surface but its the undertows that no one sees. I ilke your emotions and imagery and I got a sense of lost souls. Once being able ot see the world but then fell prey to evil/darkness. It could also be perceived as a fallen angel. It works on different levels. ALways a good thing.

[Veralily]

I love it. Very heartfelt. Well done.

~Veralily

[Baylin Snow]

Amazing! You had amazing word choices letting the entire poem flow.

[robert]

A little dark but holds the readers attention from start to finish. Excellent use of descriptive words.

[Emily B]

Silent, dark and deep much as Frost's woods on that famous snowy evening. But so much more seductive.

[Aspiring Angel]

I must admit I was captivated with this write. It while being dark still had a hint of light. I liked the lines
" I swim just below the surface
Not too far down
Just far enough
No one notices"

Your imagery is wonderful here . I could see you glide just below surface. Nice work