Without Warning

Today is your birthday my forever friend, third one in Heaven I still grieve... I miss you so much.

 

You celebrated your birthday in heaven 
this year
looking down upon us
i prayed for rain but none came
i cried and stomped my feet and shouted
so unfair

 On the night you left us death came calling like a thief in the night 
standing in the shadows
 a smile stretched cross his hideous faceless face 
 he stole you from us in a cowardly fashion -
no warning


 You were 
you are
so young, beautiful
a wee one at home
he stole you from him
from me
from him
them


 My forever friend with a way that 
eased the pain
calmed me in my weakest moments
always there
always a friend
i miss you so much it hurts to breathe
i wish you were here 
all say you are in a better place
still i think the better place would be here

here in the now with me
he she
them

i love you sweet
rest your weary bones
i feel your love around me
i know you feel mine
death can't take that

"death be not proud "
smirking in the darkness
you will never put out her light
 

Author's Note

i miss my best ever friend so unreal still and so tragic - it really does hurt to breathe
rest in peace sweet angel

Reviews

[Nephlim]

A really like the transition through the poem; there was just grief, almost denial in the beginning, then finally, there was acceptance. The narrator knew nothing could be done, so she just chose to remember the love she once felt, and still does feel.

I liked the slight repetition of things in the poem, it added to a really realistic train of thought. ^-^

[Helen Woodward]

Oh Chloe, how awful for you, I do know the feeling so well, it was like that, so quick...here one minute gone the next. I guess we have to roll with it as there is nothing else to do. I'm sad for you and I hope it is getting a little easier for you. Death is such a final goodbye, but my faith tells me that some day we will all meet again and I do mean in a better place.
You have done a wonderful job of getting your feelings on the page...no mean feat!!
Loving thoughts coming your way my friend xxxxooooxxxx

Helen...

[Valentine]

Chloe....I feel just this way about my older sister that I lost some tome ago..Much too young God took her Home..I miss her so much..Do you know how much it costs to call Heaven?????? love Kathie

[Bachman]

They're in a better place, but are aware of your mourning of them. They'll always be near you when you think or even write about them. If I was her I'd be proud of the great talent you possess. Loss is tragic, but it's a good thing. This writing is a good thing as well, very good, very deep, and personal I can tell just by reading the words and seeing how you laid them out. Great flow.

[Ellen Hammond]

The loss of such a friend can affect us in many more ways than even the loss of a parent or sibling. I can offer you my condolences but there are no words I can write to ease your pain. But you keep writing about her, even if only for yourself, as writing can be good therapy and help you to heal. For me, I found that sharing my friend through writing eased my anguish, though tears still flow but they help to wash away some of the pain.

This is a very touching and heart felt write which flows smoothly as no doubt your tears flowed writing it. Thank you for sharing.

[Michael X]

Chloe, I can't imagine losing someone as close as you were with your friend, and my deepest
thoughts extend, you are a real artist and your flow connects with the readers heart and
we remember how special she was through your words, this is beautifully done.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

These are the things that let you know the devil does exist... how else can you explain such senseless acts... i am sorry for your loss, I am sure she is looking out for you.

[Emily B]

she is not gone . . . you feel her very near :)