Until Friday

Until Friday

A Poem by Chloe..Across the Universe

It is only till Friday I say
Count the days
1-2-3-4-5-
His voice like an angel

Don't cry, I say
I will call every day
It hurts to speak
My trembling voice

Ring, ring, ring
Hello, yes, he is ready
Will be there shortly
His smug voice

Daddy's on his way
His eyes look into mine
I see the tears
His sea- blue eyes

His hand in mine
We walk outside
He watches each passing car
His sad boy eyes

There he is , I say
I feel his hand tighten
1-2-3-4-5-
His little boy voice

I love you, I say
I love you too
Five days?
His voice echoes

Five days, I say as they drive away

© 2012 Chloe..Across the Universe


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"His sad boy eyes, his little boy voice..." Heartbreaking that children get caught up in the quarrels and problems of adults and often get separated from those they love the most. This really strikes a nerve. Great write.

Posted 2 Years Ago


I really like this poem. It gives me the idea of how hard it is to leave your loved ones...

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is really good. I really want to find out more.

Posted 9 Years Ago


A story of weekend visits. On a positive note, it helps you cherish someone, even more. This is a heartfelt piece. Thank you for your creativity and passion.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Chloe..Across the Universe

10 Years Ago

Thank you so very much for your kind comments on this writing you are correct it certainly does make.. read more
Reminds me of My own experience


Posted 10 Years Ago


great write. was different to what i usually read but it was nicely written. well done :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Whether the background story is known or not, the emotion in this still reaches across either way.
Very sweet, nostalgic piece. Very well liked. :)
Thanks for sharing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


wonderfully written. thank you for sharing it. I love the way the dialogue runs

Posted 10 Years Ago


Such a cute poem! thank you for sharing it. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


I love it. Very well written, good job :)

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Chloe..Across the Universe
Chloe..Across the Universe

Smalltown, USA, AR



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