Jenny

Jenny

A Poem by Peter Mogba
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poem about Jennifer

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She is alleged to sunny days
Always calm under the roof over her sleepy heirs
After meal she feel sleepy as if she is tipsy
Where can i find such modesty?

Her name is Jenny
she likes making money
Even in a cool morning
She displeases herself to get it before its sunny
Going to school and making money
That really drives her crazy.

She is a tiger in a fight
She easily gets provoked.

She is at her sixes and sevens lately
A trusted man is what she needs mostly
That will keep her heart safely
And handle her carefully.

Her beauty glows like the sun
That makes every man want to tel her a pun
There is this thing she got
That makes men die for her like a goat
Its because she is all state.

© 2014 Peter Mogba


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Peter Mogba
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Hello Peter Mogba,

Well, there are a few punctuation errors in her like 'To tel her a pun', when it should be 'to tell her a pun'. Mmm, honestly I dont quite get some of the references in the poem, for example, if a lady's skin glows radiantly, why would you give her a pun? I presume thats to make her laugh but its a little to shady. Also, I don't quite understand the 'goat' reference. Maybe you could elaborate?

All in all, its not a bad poem, just a few things that could be a bit confusing. The words flow, though with a slight degree of difficulty. I can see the message you are trying to convey, which, in this case, is a love letter to someone named Jenny. I can see the effort being put, and I commend you for that.

Shogun

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Hello Peter Mogba,

Well, there are a few punctuation errors in her like 'To tel her a pun', when it should be 'to tell her a pun'. Mmm, honestly I dont quite get some of the references in the poem, for example, if a lady's skin glows radiantly, why would you give her a pun? I presume thats to make her laugh but its a little to shady. Also, I don't quite understand the 'goat' reference. Maybe you could elaborate?

All in all, its not a bad poem, just a few things that could be a bit confusing. The words flow, though with a slight degree of difficulty. I can see the message you are trying to convey, which, in this case, is a love letter to someone named Jenny. I can see the effort being put, and I commend you for that.

Shogun

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Abuja, federal capital teritory, Nigeria



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