Her Response

Her Response

A Poem by Elisa
"

Come back to me...

"
How selfish you are,
you venomous slave!
You would pierce yourself with enchanted needles
while I await my home's destruction!?

Would you fly to my side, 
forsaking your
precious poisons, 
if enemy soldiers breached these walls? 

No -I mean- yes...
Oh, of course you would...
 What have I done to you?

My love, please forgive me. 
I thrash at your skin
while you stand there
corrupted and cursed. 

My heart aches for your deathly touch.
I am enslaved to it. 
Without you here, the air is so thin
I try to breathe in,
 and my lungs only fill with smoke. 

Come back to me, 
and inject me with the same cruel needles, 
so I can be joined to you in everything
as I await the coming battle
that I fear will never end. 

© 2015 Elisa


Author's Note

Elisa
I decided to go slightly more narrative with this one, basing it on a plot to some fantasy story that doesn't yet exist. Thanks so much for stopping by, and have a great day!
<3 Elisa

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Nice. I liked this poetry. I really enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing

Posted 8 Years Ago


Elisa

8 Years Ago

Thanks so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
Very indecisive narrator, which is a neat contrast in a poem with some really strong, biting lines. I liked this a lot.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Elisa

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much! Yeah she's definitely in a tough situation emotionally. I'm thinking of writing m.. read more
I hope it doesn't have to exist for anyone.
This was such an amazing write though Elisa!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Elisa

8 Years Ago

I agree. Minus the fantasy element though, there are definitely people who go through the same feeli.. read more
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Rm
Hey very intriguing...I enjoyed

Posted 8 Years Ago


Elisa

8 Years Ago

Thanks so much! :)
Rm

8 Years Ago

Your welcome..
Very narrative & captivated poetry you've come up with. Seems, you wrote an epic story (historian fantasy art) in few short, simple & deep words. Enjoyed to read.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Elisa

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much!
this is like a sleepy beauty meets darren aronofsky poem. really, really cool conceptually. and you're exploration of love ventures into sickness, something that I think is daring (probably because it's what I've been doing lately). Awesome

Posted 8 Years Ago


Elisa

8 Years Ago

Wow thank you! I'm so honored :D

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Added on June 2, 2015
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Tags: heart, love, poisoned, cursed, romance, fly, us, me, you, joined, battle, fear

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Elisa
Elisa

Los Angeles, CA



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