Sometimes In The Middle of The Night

 

Sometimes in the middle of the night I am in love with you
but you are sleeping
raindrops paddle in the mud puddle outside our window
where the soil runs downhill
I meant to brace it up with stone from the old chimney crumbles
I meant to grow pole tomatoes to glow in the morning sun
I meant to love you in the daylight but the sun's glare
once it has crossed the mountain, is too bright and puts us
to a disadvantage.
The navigations of night are behind us.
At dawn I will ease your stomach with peppermint.
At dawn I will drop perfume on your pillow so that you believe
I am still with you.
Some days it is so important that you find me.
Some days you are a silhouette with the world behind you
and I watch your outline glow
I believe with the right gestures I might run to you
I believe Autumn will drop bright leaves of directions
I will swirl them slowly in the bottom of your cup like tea leaves
I will read a fortune that will bring our heads together over the cup
Sometimes in the middle of the night I am in love with you.

Reviews

[Emily B]

this one breaks my heart . . . just like it must be breaking yours

[arbitrary jane]

i have so many things to say about this... im afraid if i start i might go on for a week.
so, i'll try to stay professional.
the structure/phrasing is impeccable. i adore how you move through this. from 'sometimes' to 'meant to' to 'i will' to 'some days' to 'i belive'...
it reads like a quiet sigh. like a longing so deep it is hard to find words for it.
... you have found the words.

[Greg the Bard]

The open view of what a woman sees in her love is often kept close to the heart yet it is the back ground for a relationship that last a lifetime. You writing is more often than not a view into a womans thoughts. This is wonderful and wimsical.

[Ed Hart]

sometimes you plug into a major connection
i believe your poetry is like fine gold
pure and happy as sudden treasure
sometimes i wonder at connections and separations
i believe they are always in balance
and sometimes i just stand here in a trance
because i believe in you and pole tomatoes

[Art]

sometimes...a dreamy way of escaping into the depths of love and life...nice work

[deeps]

Ah Phibby this is just so wonderful. I feel the lightness in this write. Very nicely done.

[....]

Ah I feel the tug of hope & love in this. Amazing write that is really beuatiful.....xo