Friend

A little girl makes a new friend.

 

"I like it here in the new house, don't you? How long have you been here?" The little girl toyed aimlessly with the blonde pigtails of her doll. "I used to live in a smaller house, but daddy is rich now so we got a biiiggg house!" She smiled a bright young smile, happy to be in her large, well-lit room. "His boss gave him a bunch of money and now we have a shiny red car, and the big house, and I have you too. It's dark outside now so I can't go out and play, so I just have to play with you! I'm glad I found you under the bed you know, so I'll give you a name. I'll call you Helen"

"Honey?" A voice from the other side of the door echoed. "It's dinner time, who are you talking to?"

"Helen, momma, I found her today!"

"Alright, just wash up. No dirty fingernails tonight."

"Okay Momma! I'm hungry...are you hungry?"



It smiled from under the bed.

 

 

 

Reviews

[Christina Harper: Sitti..]

I agree with Tee-o. It's evil to grab my attention like that and then leave me hanging. I think it was great, though. But, I do have a suggestion. The line starting, "I used to live in a smaller house..." would flow a little better when you read it if you started a new paragraph right there. But it's just my opinion. Good job though! I liked the simplicity of it.

[Gary Hill]

I like the way the horror is never truly spelled out. Lovecraft always believed that the greatest horror is that in the shadows because the mind of the reader creates things far more terrifying than we can ever spell out for them.

[Catala]

I agree... if i had any talent with animation (i've never tried) I'd beg your permission to give it life... as it were.... can i make it into a graphic short? (comic)

I love the simple and yet suprising bit at the end.

[Tee-o]

Well, don't stop there - Keep going!!!
You got my interest up and now I just have know the rest of the story.
You can't leave me hanging like this.
Come on - Keep going!
OK?
Please?
Pretty Please?