Fork Lightning

Flash, bang, wallop ........

Fork Lightning

A flashing branch of fork lightning

Across a grey black threatening sky

Startlingly jolted precious memories

Of our momentous initial encounter

First glimpse was as a discharged bolt

Travelling through a dark clouded soul

Opening a small channel into my heart

Exploding thunderous crashing adore

An inundation of shivering rare emotions

Surged from dizzy head to trembling toes

Like a deluge of summer scented rain

In an enjoyable soaking of sacred passion

This storm of love was our enlightenment

Cleansed past trails and disappointments

Bringing rejuvenating settled calmness

For both our kindred inseparable spirits

Copyright @ Phillozofee 2018

Reviews

[Ardra]

It reads like a prayer... like a song of soul...
Beautiful Phill.... reminded me so many beautiful things... when I read them....
Your poems...have somehow always have rite timing with my thought process lol...
Kind of makes me wonder you don't spy heheh :p

[barleygirl]

Great job doing an artful extended metaphor that marries the idea of lightning with the way it can feel to be jolted into passionate adoration! This is one of the strongest poems of yours that I've read lately becuz your love of vocabulary & cerebral approach are balanced with powerful imagery & strong word-crafting, which gives your poem an overall graceful flow (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Thank you so much for your lovely review - I shall try and keep up the standard ... :-)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

lightning doesn't strike twice in the same place...probably true...that first love, that first strike, and our reaction to the storm...a once in a lifetime happening...
and i think we do stay kindred spirits even if we don't stay with that person.

it always feels like we stay attached...

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Too true my friend - thanks for viewing and your comments. :-)

[Ghost]

A very good write about a storm brewing and lightening streaking across the sky.... sometimes storms are nice to watch but then other times it is hoping for it to be over... Thank you for sharing

[Phill Oz O'fee]

And - thank you my friend! :-)

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Amazing- wham bam - thankyou mam- that’s what a true connection should be when your spirits collide and connect- I say if you feel a connection when just chatting but what will it be on meeting- explosive electrical- fork lightening like you say- knowing exactly where the victim of love is a sure shot like no other- wonderful- burning alive and on fire🌹

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Glad you found it 'electrifying' - thanks for the kind review. :-)

[‘Thoughts In Time’🌹]

Any time my pleasure-🌹

[H L Rose]

I think this is absolutely fantastic!

In the first paragraph, I really like the line “Startlingly jolted precious memories”. At first I felt like I was stumbling over “startlingly”, but after reading it a second time, I’ve decided I really like this line because each word makes an impact and “startlingly” I think, fits very well because the same thing that makes me kind of stumble over it also makes me focus on it.

“Traveling through a dark clouded soul”, this line is very provoking. It says a lot and adds to the imagery. “Exploding thunderous crashing adore” this is another line where each word makes an impact and I’m definitely a fan. I do think though, that it’s an example of how you mIgor want to consider adding more punctuation. It may help bring about further clarity.

I love the entire third paragraph. I couldn’t pick out a favorite line. I love the use of “shivering” in “shivering rare emotions” and “surged from dizzy head to trembling toes” is a fantastic line. I love the analogy of rain in the 3 and 4th line of stanza 3 as well.

The 4th stanza is a nice ending. It think it sums it up very well and ending on “kindred inseparable spirits” is perfect.

I really enjoyed reading this!

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Wow ... thank you Hannah for a humbling review - so pleased you liked my share! :-)

[H L Rose]

Of course! It’s great!