The Challenge

Thoughts of a greater love ...

The Challenge

Laws laid down

Before the dawning of insanity,

Keep a divinity of order

Throughout the cosmos.

 

Non dimensional tranquillity

In an eternal quantity,

Where purity itself was cleansed

In unconditional love for all.

 

Inconceivable to imagine

A minuscule rift of chaos,

Would vent such devastation

Through a Man of Clay.

 

Millenniums of tears

To patch this wounded multi-universe,

Fell short of ancient standards

And so, the gauntlet passed to One.

 

The enormity of the challenge

Was an unimaginable concept to the Man of Clay,

Not so to the chosen One

A predestined sacrifice, to restore the balance.

 

Phillozofee @ 2008

Reviews

[Gandré]

pretty and nice to read, you now how to write about this again and again, and give us more! but in universe there is no balance; it might be a wishful thought finding it, your man of war is here and there and everywhere maniacally manically minifoldly active. soon there will be a change I believe. and what do you think?

[Carole]

I knew what you were getting at from the beginning. This is a bit different for you. I find you to be quite philosophical and you have to be a theology major from the majority of your writes, so you wove the most important thread of humanity (in my eyes) into this piece. I think there are some that aren't going to "get it" with your selection of wording. I personally liked your word choices, but some might have to dig out the deeper meaning, and hey, that might be the purpose of your write. Whatever the case, good job, my friend!

[J. Hampton]

And Soooooo...." the gauntlet passed to one" ....aptly put ...I like that

( love this so much )
"Non dimensional tranquillity

In an eternal quantity,

Where purity itself was cleansed

In unconditional love for all."

Phil.... I absolutely love your writes

Blesssssssss

[Carrie Montgomery]

"Laws laid down

Before the dawning of insanity"... great opening. I am sure it will grab the reader's attention for the simple fact that rules/laws are often a sore spot and instantly: rebellion, even though laws are there to PROTECT us. "Where purity itself was cleansed

In unconditional love for all" free from sin Himself, he died for OUR sins , I find it ironic and thinking from a parents perspective (God was his FATHER, after all) it is a huge sacrifice. "Inconceivable to imagine", indeed. "The enormity of the challenge

Was an unimaginable concept to the Man of Clay,

Not so to the chosen One

A predestined sacrifice, to restore the balance" yes, it is SUCH an unimaginable concept, that this poem will be met with outrage, misunderstanding, and wonder. I think you did a great job here: this one makes you think, and will get many many different reactions and interpretations- which is what great art is all about, is it not?

[Valentine]

Man of clay..you lost me there..if this is about jesus ..I can't imagine Him sitting still and letting all of this world fall to pieces around us..Just wait..He is working out a salvation plan right now for America..God bless..valentien

[desertraven]

wonderful piece with such depth and insight.
Sandra

[Belinda Rice]

nice right ty you for sharing this with me....greatly penned.....keep up the good work.Only you know what you like to write and how the feeling come to heart and mind..this is truly a good peace not one of your greatest but i like it....Belinda

[James K. Blaylock]

A truly powerful piece, and as always I'm a huge fan of your moving work. Be blessed!

jkb

[Kelley Pascoe]

Very Deep poem!!! I like your train of thought in this.
Great write Phill. Thanks for sharing.
Kelley Frost

[Bethany Woody]

It's about the sacrifices that God has made for us humans here on earth and how we can't wrap our minds around many of them. That we would never in a million years do for others what he has done for us.
The piece is different, not like anything I have read on here before, and not just for the subject matter, but for the word choices as well.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

There is always a sacrifice to be made when it comes to being an artist or a parent, this world still seems caught in the throes of entropy. I enjoyed the read as always. Good words.