Gone to Green

Artful in such ways

Strolling through the day

Carrying the soul

The realm of should bes

Rose timid upon a stream

Life is his dream

Smiling willow so it seems

Known in coasted gleams

Lilies tied to breath

For all that lies beneath

This roof like home

Being the curve like tone

Carrying stone feet

Towards another clean

Flowered world of sways

To be another one at bay

Tonight a whisper would fly

Across the meadowing shy 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is highly original writing done with a ton of nature imagery. I love how your sparkling impressions convey both the sensations of a place & the feelings of a mood. I like how you seem to contrast "gone to green" (title) with the content of your message. "Gone to Green" seems to imply things that might have a more spring-like essence, whereas your descriptions remind me of autumn. I love this juxtaposition. After all, in California, every season is green! And I love what green signifies: LIFE! Your poem is full of life (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

nature to poetry and vice versa...excellent slant rhyme...there is so much green...and yet the fall will bring out the once shy colors...the rose maybe timid but it really wants to bloom....and it should get a chance...
flowers need to bloom before fall...before they die...they hope to overcome the shy.
j.

[B]

Thanks J
You got it