Emerald Rain

Small brisk strokes jab somber
Rhythms across dead strings.
Fingers resonate with clarity like
Blue roses in secret gardens.

Echoes loom to ascension,
Angels breaking wings.

With one look, all
Is siphoned into a lead heart,
Beating into rich anchors
Of skinned emotion.

It can never die.

Reviews

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

Thank you for the read request.

I think it is wonderful how you can say so much is such a short poem. I do feel that it may be a little too short, however, to add more seems to waste the ambiguity and mezmorization that it holds over the reader. It is really effective that your ending is just one line. It's really in your face, that last line.

You did a wonderful job of putting forth the feelings presented throughout. That is important. It brings a new meaning to the poem and helps to deliver it intensly.

Thank you for sharing.

[v.a. stein]

Well put, the emtion in this one was eloborated with a lil haze, but the over all grab pulled the reader in. I'd say work a little more on depth. but other than that, this one weighed the scale.

[sheerpoetry]

"Fingers resonate with clarity like
Blue roses in secret gardens."

these are my favorite lines

[AK]

This reminds me of my old Yamaha guitar. For twenty-five years it has helped me write. And it holds a tuning like a pittbull. It too "can never die".

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

wow, you are such a good writer, your putting me to shame! lol. this is so beautifully penned, with great detail, yet so sharp.

my fav part:

With one look, all
Is siphoned into a lead heart,
Beating into rich anchors
Of skinned emotion.

wow.....breathtaking, really. tahnks for sending me requests. send more, i'll send you some of my best too.

seattle poets rule!!

[Hayame]

Thank you for sending me a read request, this is a lovely poem. Actually, and I mean this in a good way so please don't take any offense, I think it would make a fantastic creepypasta.

[Vaishali..^_^]

wow..!this is so beautiful...!
thanks for sharing...
great write...!

[Alucard]

I really like the mysterious overtone to this piece, nicely done!

[Anita B Jacques]

Good write, a lead heart missing out . colorful but so sad. thank you for sharing with us. God Bless you.

[Kathryn]

This piece is very rich. Full of color and sounds and feeling.
Really powerful title- evokes a lot of strong ideas.
Well written, thanks for sharing with us.

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