Change

Your bright, blue eyes,

Look dull and gray.

I hope to bring light to them,

Some other day.

Your lovely smile,

Is turned upside down.

I hope I can change that,

Turn it around.

Your mind's full of thoughts,

So dark and empty.

I hope I can make it,

So it's colors you see.

Your emotions are anonymous,

Your color is black.

And if you ever fall,

I'll bounce you right back.

You feed on your silence,

You live on disease.

I hope that you evil,

Can rip at the seams.

I will break this dark spell,

A sorcerer's charm.

I will fix you up,

Do you no harm

Even now I wonder,

Can you be saved?

I always wondered,

Can you be sane?

As I sit in this room,

With white padded walls,

I will always wonder,

Can I change at all? 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[icelandicblue]

A wonderful concoction of a poem.

[PoetryPenPal]

Thank you very much!

[R. L. Hill]

Very interesting finish. Nice poem

[PoetryPenPal]

Thank you very much.

[prodicallife]

Dear writer,

Woowww!!!

That is amazing how you closed the work.

I pretty much appreciate your approach, appropriate words and the perfect flow.

One very small thing, although it does not sounds messed up but, if you could arrange them in different paragraphs, it would add welcomes to it.

Thanks for sharing

Stay blessed
Prodical

[PoetryPenPal]

Thanks a lot Protocol!

[prodicallife]

Dear writer,

You are welcome.

I hope you would not mind if I correct you with my name, it's Prodical :)

Stay blessed
Prodical

[PoetryPenPal]

Oh. Sorry. I'm not good at spelling. Thanks for the correction:-)

[prodicallife]

You are always welcome dear writer :)

Stay blessed
Prodical

[Maddi Snowden]

I really like it alot! Well written!! The topic is so interesting and I love the twist at the end. Nice job! (:

[PoetryPenPal]

Thank you very much!

[Maddy]

I absolutely loved this poem! It misleads the reader and you don't know who the piece is directed to until the very end. I enjoy this style of writing. It really pulls me in. Phenomenal job!

[PoetryPenPal]

Thanks Maddy!

[Maddy]

You're welcome!

[Emmy]

Very nice! There were a few spots I spotted that you might need to fix. Read through it and I believe you'll be able to find them. I enjoyed this! Good job!

[PoetryPenPal]

I will look over my poem for any mistakes! Thank you for reading and reviewing.

[Emmy]

Anytime!:)

[Lydia Shutter]

The rhyming and rhythm was good in this one. I thought you were talking about changing someone else's darkness to light till I came to the end of the poem. The introspection is very good. Emotions well expressed. Lydi**

[PoetryPenPal]

Thank you very much Lydi!

[Praveeta]

So beautifully written, reminds me of Harry Potter.

I will break this dark spell,
A sorcerer's charm.
I will fix you up,
Do you no harm

[PoetryPenPal]

I see where you are going with the Harry Potter comment. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!

[Praveeta]

You are most welcome. I love Harry Potter and appreciate JK Rowling's work :)

[PoetryPenPal]

I love Harry Potter too! Thanks again for your review!

[Sami Khalil]

"Your mind's full of thoughts,

So dark and empty.

I hope I can make it,

So it's colors you see.

Your emotions are anonymous,

Your color is black.

And if you ever fall,

I'll bounce you right back.

You feed on your silence,

You live on disease.

I hope that you evil,

Can rip at the seams."

A well written poem. I like those lines the most...:)...................

[PoetryPenPal]

Thank you so much Sami! I like those lines too!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)................

[PoetryPenPal]

.....................:-)

[Sami Khalil]

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