The Ocean!

The waves are so beautiful
The breeze through my skin
I picture the waves are so beautiful 
I picture those gloomy blue eyes
We sit and share stories
As we lie on the white sand
His hand in mine
As sweet as chocolate melted
On top of a field of ice cream

 

Author's Note

Wrote this just 4 fun!

Reviews

[Minx-cat]

Some really awesome images: "The breeze through my skin" and "As sweet as chocolate melted / On top of a field of ice cream" are my favourite lines. Do yourself a favour and PLEASE clean up the mistakes...
1. Repeated first two lines by mistake
2. I picture *these* gloomy blue eyes
3. We *sit* and share stories
4. As we * lie on* the white sand
Mistakes ruin the experience of reading your wonderful writing - take a bit more care when you upload, and I'm sure people will appreciate you for it. Keep it up :)