Dust

Dust

A Poem by Prodigo

The ducks, they dance and the garden is burning
The people, they prance and the garden is burning
The fish, they feast and the garden is burning
Nobody knows the garden is burning

The baker, he bakes and the city is burning
The sick people shake and the city is burning
The lovers, they love and the city is burning
Nobody knows the city is burning

The children, they play and the field is burning
The horses, they neigh and the field is burning
The farmer, he plows and the field is burning
Nobody knows the field is burning

Burning and burning, the flames go higher
Higher and Higher, look at the fire
Ashes to ashes, dust to dust
Nobody knows the world is burning

© 2010 Prodigo


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F**k yea!
I mean, I love this :)

Good rhythm, alliteration, so forth.

The lines that didn't fit in as great was "The fish, they laugh and the garden is burning."
"Laugh" seems misplaced. According to the rest of the stanza, the word should start with a "f". Just a thought.


Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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wow i really love this. i love the meaning put to it. great poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Haha, you never disappoint, Akroma. Thanks :) I'm gonna fix it now

Posted 13 Years Ago


F**k yea!
I mean, I love this :)

Good rhythm, alliteration, so forth.

The lines that didn't fit in as great was "The fish, they laugh and the garden is burning."
"Laugh" seems misplaced. According to the rest of the stanza, the word should start with a "f". Just a thought.


Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on December 23, 2010
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Victoria, TX



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