Meet Me

Meet Me

Open your lashes, it has been long I saw myself

Say sweet phrases, has been years heard myself

 

Come nearer to me, has been ages I met myself

Touch me tender and easy, its yearses felt myself

 

Unknot my tousled strands, its long decked myself

In my ear sing songs, has been days sang to myself

 

Make my self meet me, its lives I talked to myself

Converge with me, it has been long I knew myself.

4.07pm, 14 August 2013

Reviews

[A.A.]

I find this unnerving.. It seems to speak less by sense, than by resonance, and it speaks on different levels as a result. The development from the simple actions of opening, speaking and touching to 'unknot my tousled strands', and then again to 'make my self meet me', and 'converge with me', open up a great deal of space within the poem, and you develop it with such economy. It's hard to pick out anything that you could sharpen.. You do use 'long', twice, but that's probably intentional, and it doesn't get in the way.. 'Tender and easy' seems, to me, to come from a different place as´the rest of the poem, but that's not necessarily a criticism either.

It's been a long time since I've read anybody's work on here, and you encourage me to go browsing further. Thank you.

[Prritiy]

Happy New Year!

I am touched by your kind visit and wonderful words. Thanks a lot.
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I am touched by your kind visit and wonderful words. Thanks a lot.

I am happy that you liked it and am really out of words to convey :) (hope this says it)

[zainul]

Meeting the wonderful poem after two years of its publication seems unusual for me.
I don't know how it happened.
It's really a great tribute to 'Myself'.
Thanks for sharing the lovely work.

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

What a passionate write! Good stuff

[ron]

Your words have such passion in them. Anyone would be lucky to be this close to you.

[Prritiy]

Thanks a lot Ron for such encouraging words.

[ron]

You are most welcome Prritiy

[The dark story]

i love the strength in the diction and the style that caries the theme so smoothly.

[Prritiy]

Thankyou so much Atiba for your precious time and wonderful words :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Nice couplets, Prritiy. I like the theme about having someone who could help you identify more yourself...
Well-penned.

[Prritiy]

Dhaye thankyou very much for liking and giving your kind comments.

[DIVYA]

Oh! How romantic!
Its seldom we find someone who knows us as we know ourselves. When we do, they are called soul mates. We must hold on to such love. Amazing, beautiful emotion exprssed with much flair Prritiy. Applause!

[Prritiy]

Thanks a lot Divya, am glad you liked it. :)

[ayosonolowo]

Really nicely done, i really like the format you used,

[Prritiy]

Thank you so much for your kind words :)

[ayosonolowo]

You're welcome

[Sami Khalil]

The teasing , the longing , the call of love , the songs awaiting your beloved along with the rhythms of tender songs in the long nights. I love how it you ended the poem with : myself ...as if to give an oath of sorts from yourself...Splendid...:)

[Prritiy]

Thanks a lot Sami for looking into the soul of lines. Am glad you liked it and graced it with your honorable words.

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...Any time...:)

[Prritiy]

Thanks :)
Good Night :)

[Sami Khalil]

Good night...:)

[Prritiy]

:) :) :) :)

[StoryTellerWriter]

"Meet me", said the time traveler. "But how?" asked the man in the machine. "Adjust the time on the machine and close your eyes" said the time traveler. "Like this?" the man asked, and all of a sudden, they met.

[Prritiy]

Thanks Story teller :)