Changing Emotions

Me and Jadedsparrow wrote this together. Putting both of our emotions into it.

Changing Emotions
I feel like I'm in a sea.
Sometimes calm and peaceful,
Other times rough and violent.
Feeling happy that I found another,
But crashing due to the ones in my past...
Where will these bombarding winds take me?
My struggles have left me very quick to question and even slower to trust.
At times it feels like my heart has been used to kindle a fire,
And others when there is nothing but icy resolve.
I cannot fight the way I feel
What I have been put through still haunts me.
It runs through every vein in my body;
But I can feel it draining out.
Perhaps when it is gone, I will be able to allow love back in.
When that day will come, I can only speculate...
Failure upon failure has shown me that I have not quite laid my burdens down.
So I will long for the day when my heart is once again light,
And these troubles which seem to taunt me are nothing more than a whisper on the wind...

 

Written by QuietPoet and JadedSparrow

Reviews

[THE LOST ROSE]

You had my attention at...I feel like I'm in a sea.
Sometimes calm and peaceful,
Other times rough and violent.
Feeling happy that I found another,
But crashing due to the ones in my past...
It is amazing what people from our past can conjure up in our spirit and emotion. Thanks for giving me the words to explain what I have been trying to explain for years. Amazing write. Thanks for sharing.

[Marvin Lewis Jr.]

I would love to put my favorite lines in this review, but I'd have to retype your entire poem!
I like everything about this piece, especially the way the two of you depicted pain, uncertainty, and fear.
Truly artistic and I enjoyed reading.
Excellent job!

[Christine]

You two make a wonderful writing team!!!
This is amazing.
The from flow of the words to the rhythm of the poem.
Wonderful and poignant with a dab of wisdom thrown in the mix.
Love it!!!
One of my new favorites!!!
Christine :-)

[Lyrical Love]

Failure upon failure has shown me that I have not quite laid my burdens down.
So I will long for the day when my heart is once again light,
And these troubles which seem to taunt me are nothing more than a whisper on the wind...

These three lines are freeing...I loved this piece! The two of you must hear the same music to dance so wonderfully together. Nice flow too.
Kudos!!

[JadedSparrow]

Just wanted to drop by and say thanks to all who have read and reviewd this poem. Thanks again for working with me QP. : )

JS

[Dani California]

So I will long for the day when my heart is once again light,
And these troubles which seem to taunt me are nothing more than a whisper on the wind...

My favorite part .... as I know it will come to pass ... :)

This is yet another great collab from you two. :) You blend so well that it is
difficult to tell one from the others' writing. That's rare.. usually there is a fairly
distinct difference between the writers' styles.

Great job as always!

[Laura E. Aranda]

I love these pieces that you two write together! Thanks for sending it my way to read. Very specific imagery and similes. Nice. Cheers,lea

[jaime]

amazing! stunning! brilliant! I felt the sway of "changing emotions" ...awesome job you two!

[Veronica Franco]

Wow, it is like reading my thoughts sometimes. I love how you describe everything. You can feel every emotion.

[Sydelle Houston]

Very nicely done! I applaud your joint effort!