Broken Heart~

That night to me, is still soo clear,

The night you said, "we're done"...

all I could do, was shed a tear,

For my heart did weigh a ton.

Long after you were gone,

I stayed And stared through waters deep,

so slow the crescent waters swayed,

As if for me they weep.

The moonlight did outline my way,

But waiting there for me,

were ghosts and ghouls and horrid things,

and a painful life to see.

Between two paths I need decide,

but neither would do good

One would let me keep my pride,

But on the other one you stood

I turned to face away from you,

for I could see no more

Of all the things you put me through

None else made me so sore

Reviews

I really like this. You explore a lot of emotion within your writing.
I think this line is beautifully written: "so slow the crescent waters swayed"
Nicely done, keep up the good work :)

[Wolf]

I love your poem!
You described the feeling of a breakup so clearly, it gave me the feeling that I was in place. Good job!
This poem is very emotional indeed.
Keep up the great writings! :)

[K-mo]

this is very good, I like it a lot, the emotion is written clear as day. Good job!

[MusicJunkie]

So good. There is so much emotion in it. I like it! I get the two paths, story of my life.