Dying in Love

It hurts to breathe because every breath I take proves I can't live without you.

Whenever I think of you,

my tears roll out like rain.

Pass down on my cheeks,

and I just taste the pain…

All the moment I wish to cry,

and it lets me feel so blue.

How can I now forget my past,

I really don’t have any clue…

 

You’re my Love;

you’re everything I need in my life.

You’re now gone so far,

tell me how can I be just so fine…

I’m lost down the way,

kissing my death in every moment.

It’s so hard to move on now,

by hiding your pain in my chest…

 

I wish if I could turn you back,

‘cause I don’t want you to go away.

Without you, Oh my Love!

I have nothing to do except cry…

How can I explain you now,

how badly I’m losing my faith.

Tell me dear, what could I’ve done,

to make you feel what’s there in my heart…

 

Author's Note

Was lying on the floor, thinking of someone I have ever needed...& wrote this. Don't even know... Need your comments... Plz

Reviews

[Lorraine]

Personally, I think it's a bit too cheesy and overly dramatic, but that's perhaps because of my lack of experience. And more so, if that's how you feel then I've got nothing else to say to that. Though I take it as an exaggeration of what you're probably feeling, I think you've made your point quite so well. The way you wrote this poem depicts the depth of emotion from which it has come. Really sad. It's the irony that I love the best in this poem. How something as pure as love--the one that makes the whole world go round, and the one that makes each one of us care for each others welfare--can push someone to death. Great Read. Very expressive.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[Fallen Angel]

I love it! It rocks! It's so emotional and awesome!