Silence

A very disturbing and morbid poem I created

Silence, He’s coming, the evil man is coming.

I hear his footsteps, as the screen is humming.

He’s coming to get hurt us,

He’s coming for us.

Don’t bother running, He’ll see you run.

Don’t bother hiding, he has a gun.

He pulled it out and shot a girl.

Don’t run. Don’t run.

Stay ,Stay!

Don’t leave her corpse!

Save the children! Save that girl!

Your fate will be worse

Help the body lead itself to the hearse.

Don’t bothering screaming, its amusing to him.

Don’t cry, or  you’ll bleed.

Run away children, run away, stumble on the corpses.

Don’t trip, okay?

As the shots fire.

It’s the shooters desire.

You’re in Death’s death note.

Hide under the seats, as if you were hiding from the boogyman under your bed sheets!

Run away, for the door.

Don’t fail, like the bodies on the floor.

Go for the door, run away.

Get help.

People are dying.

Children are crying.

Run for the door,

Get to the cops,

Run for the door,

As those who failed  drop to the floor.

Run, Run, Run !

This is a game to his twisted mind.

Get help, before it’s your time.

The cops are coming.

I hear the sirens.

Lots of them.

It’s okay,

He’s inside.

It’s just a little blood.

He’ll leave you alone,

Until he’s bored.

Run Stay Run Stay

Should I stay or go away?

Gun Shots fire.

Deaths desire.

Murderer for hire.

Run.

Reviews

[C.A. Lucas]

At first you said there's no use in running or hiding, then you said run and hide. I thought it was a mistake, but I also thought it added something to the poem, like a presentation of hopelessness, then you tied it together at the end and I knew were a great writer :)

[Soul Fire]

Thank you very much ,and ahaa yes that is expressing the feelings of hopelessness..

[Coyote Poetry]

Great use of words. You create fear, mystery and bad situation. I like the short lines allowing the story to flow to the very good ending. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Soul Fire]

Thank you :D

[soady]

On the poem itself, it needs fixing in terms of grammar. Also, too much rhyming for my taste. Stating the obvious too much maybe, I like to say a lot in little words. I was promised a morbid song and I got a chasing story. Sorry, I don't mean to be rough, just spilling it out...

[Soul Fire]

Ok,thanks for the review.

[DarknessPeering]

Wow, I live in a city that recently had a great despair. There was a massacre, and a shooter wounded and took the life of innocents. This poem makes me feel that this is the kind of chaos and fear that must have clouded their minds.

[Soul Fire]

Aurora,Colorado?

[DarknessPeering]

Yeah.

[Soul Fire]

:( R.I.P

[DarknessPeering]

Well, it is a beautiful poem :)

[DarknessPeering]

I used to write them but in truth I think I was really awful lol.

[Soul Fire]

Thank you.