coca~cola

                          high fructose
                            corn syrup
                             mixed w/
                         

                          soda water--
                    viewed through your
                diaphanous, atlanta-green

            bodice... mneme inspires
              

 

              remembrance-- my first

                sweet, sugared taste

 

                  of summery satisfaction
               from your vitreous lips

Reviews

[Sara]

haha, i've been looking through your poetry and it's all so great, but i have to say i simply love the playfulness of this one! i love how you manipulated the font and form for this, it's so clever and goes well with the poem's sweetly humorous tone ;) and the line 'viewed through your/diaphanous, atlanta-green bodice' -- jeez, i feel like such an idiot for not seeing that similarity before, it's so obvious now... and those two adjectives are just beautifully put together. great job. :)