Loving Me W/a Receipt

You're loving me with a receipt

Someone you love but can't afford to keep

Maybe you'll save me for a rainy day

Or maybe you'll never take me out of layaway

 

I still feel quite blended

You have love lyke money so spend it

Spend it because I'm sure you'll hold tight to your receipt

Forgetting that we must sow to properly reap

 

Throwing me to the side after one try

Calling me names but you are what you buy

Hands lost as I squeeze you tight

I suppose you decided to love me tonight

 

Wanting you to bare the same excitement you once wore

Instead you can't look at me lyke you did before

I'll probably walk the path of lyfe w/a sense of defeat. . .

Until you finally love me and trash your receipt

 

One day I will reveal to you what you lack

And you'll frame your receipt, never wanting to bring me back

 

By: B. G. R.

Finished: 7/29/2008 11:00pm

Reviews

[wizthom]

lady ur writing style is such as i love to read someone who is creative ,imaginative ,full of emotions without caring who knows it.it is called power,the receipt that will take poetry to the next phase,,peace wizthom

[Mysty Rayn]

Another great write. Nice flow.

[☮]

I relate to this style! I definitely enjoyed it. I understand the emotions conveyed and like the unique "ly" instead of "li" usage in your words.

Keep sending them over.
Cyn

[Angel's Lady]

Forgetting that we must sow to properly reap -- What a wonderfully written line! I do wish I had written this myself! Great job here! Beautiful imagery, because you so clearly painted 'the' picture for us all to see! Great write!

[universalove]

this one is just and true. well written. i like it alot. you do have a special way with words that touch the spirit.

[A LaDy NaMeD D]

"Throwing me to the side after one try

Calling me names but you are what you buy" :

That said it all lol. Seriously though it said it all those were my favorite lines, the whole poem is good. But those lines...lol said it all.