A reflection in the mirror

Reflection in the mirror.

I've watched you from the other side.
I know you,
Like the back of my hand.

Every flaw, every dream
The fear in your eyes,
And the hopeful gleam.

I've viewed the world through your eyes,
Innocently believed your truths,
And accepted all the lies.

While you basked in the glory
That the world showered upon you
Stared at me for hours,
Till I acknowledged that it's true.

And i wonder if you'd recognise me
If you saw me today,
Standing in the shards of promises
That you broke along the way.

I am your reflection,
Of a decade later.
Holding out hope,
For something greater.

I am the glint in the mirror,
A reminiscent of your past.
The rue of your mistakes,
The first and the last.

I can bend the rays of light.
Such that it plays across your skin
Shows you what you want to see,
And hides the scars within.

The world will someday forget you,
Be privy to this fact.
Resiliently you'll smile at me,
And i will always smile back.

Reviews

[emipoemi]

...........wow! This is profound beyond belief! Strong imagery, brilliant musicality - virtual perfection! If I may, I just have 3 minor notes, and only one of them is suggesting you remove a word so that the power is stronger and the musicality flows smoother. That word is "shall" from the second last line. It reads better without it....excuse me, rather contracted: "Resiliently you'll smile at me". Sounds much better.

The other two notes concern a bit of confusion I have, and just want to clarify them:

1. "excepted all the lies" - did you actually mean "accepted" or do you mean "disregard" ("except" in this case would mean "disregard")

2. The stanza beginning "While you basked in the glory" is kind of confusing to me. I don't know quite what it's saying. For starters, there shouldn't be a comma after "glory" but after the "you" of the second line, since those lines appear to be one thought. By that "stared at me for hours" might be missing a "you" at the beginning to paint the picture better (and no comma after "hours" since the last line of the stanza shares the same thought). And then the "that" in the last line doesn't seem to have an antecedent.....what is it referring to? Perhaps "what's true" instead of "that it's true" would work better since the "what doesn't require any antecedent to get its meaning across. By "what" the reader would figure that it's simply the personal truths of the poem's "I", or truths relative to the "I" themself but not necessarily important for the reader to know. If you could explain your intention in this stanza, I could probably better guide you, but at first glance, the suggestions I've made are what I assumed the direction of the poem to be.

Other than that, this poem is divinely written! I could feel the profound energy with every word upon the page. Absolutely fantastic! Well done!

[Reese]

Thankyou so much for this. I agree with everything you said. I'll make the changes.

[Reese]

In the "basked in the glory" stanza im trying to express vanity and insecurities. The person is showered with flattery, but still
needs to stare at her reflection for hours to accept that she's worthy of it

[emipoemi]

With that explanation, my comments on the comma placements and the "you" beginning the third line still stand. The comment about the "that it's true" would still stand as well, given "that it's true" would not quite convey the notion that she's believes she's worthy of the glory since there's no clear antecedent to that. However, you could also opt to play with the line to include a reference to being worthy of the glory and then find another rhyme (I would suggest this option, given leaving it as "what's true" feels a little vague even though it would still make sense. There would be more power if you play with the last line a little (find synonyms of certain words to either cut or add syllables necessary to maintain the musicality). You can do it! If you can write a poem of this calibre, you can edit it into a fine gem. Good luck.

[Poetic Beauty]

This whole piece is done very well and insightful. We often would tell ourselves different things at different times.

[Gee]

The flow was off in a few places but that aside a really well written poem. Well done that lady