Saving Face

Pride, Fear and Vulnerability

How can you expect
to give your heart
while saving face
when every soul
standing before her
is an open book

She reads your mind
digesting thoughts
rendering each word
null and void
until presented
on a Silver Platter

And...

You hold her affection
wrapped as a gift
possessed but unaccepted
keeping your reaction
abstruse and Alarming
while her intentions
are undeniably authentic

But...

When the bow
becomes a Padlock
and the wrapping paper
weathers away into stone
you'll look
into the mirror

At the Face you saved
and ask yourself
over and over again
how could such anguish
have been worth
so relentlessly

Fighting for...........

Reviews

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what a great metaphor..how many times have we all been down this road..saving face clearly is lying to yourself, many noses have been cut off for this reason..your use of affection as a gift that you refuse of accept but keep without using really captured the understanding of the feeling and then the bow becoming a paddock..this just strenghtens the poem..a really well constructed and thought out piece which shows your every rising talent..

[KAREN]

A well written relateable poem! Nice flow and so many great lines in this piece of art! BRAVO!!

[Hayley]

Your mind is one amazing phenomenon, let me tell you. I love the effort put into keeping the uniformity of the metaphor throughout.
The stanza that intrigued me most was "
When the bow
becomes a Padlock
and the wrapping paper
weathers away into stone
you'll look
into the mirror"
Such defined progress of stripping down to one's core. Excellent work!

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Back ..I love this poem and what it says to me.. though it is a bit sad... saving someone, fighting for someone to regret it later down the line..Very good use of metaphors.

[Amila Jay]

Wow, a great write it is:)

[Siddhartha]

Such a telling tale about hypocrisy and the mortal need to seek conformity and told with so much grace and virtuosity. Wonderful work.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

So wonderfully written beautiful ... someone is in my ear yelling for the pc .. i will be back

Chloe

[EMMIE]

THIS IS GREAT WORK. CREATIVITY, IMAGINATION, AND FLOW. DON'T YOU JUST LOVE WHAT POETRY DOES! GREAT WORK!

[Rene Velez]

yes indeed, I have seen it in my own relationships, this is said so well...You have me reassessing my own emotions and loves.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A stirring piece that resides in the mind of those less needing of the methaphor, well done, good read.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Magnificent! One of your best!