WARRIOR

It's the college try
better than any moonwalk
or electric slide
at times life
can be extremely unkind...
digging I am
amazed at the words that I find
setting the stage for
emotions to shine
for better or worse,
without them I walk this
world like the blind
and unrefined like coal
dark temple
with a captured soul,
life would take it's toll
jagged in the purest of hearts
bleeds my abstract art
with the warriors stain.

Reviews

[Zoe Jay]

Great energy to this. Bounce, whimsical rhythm and rhyme, very positive feel from this poem. It bounces really well from one rhyme to another, they really anchor this poem, absolutely beautifully done. The flow is dense but satisfying and easy to read. You have clearly given care and thought to the structure, rhythm and rhyme, and it's brilliantly executed. Really professional writing, and very positive, very pleasing to the reader, inspirational, a really good job.

[November Gold]

I love the beat and the movement that comes along with your writing. Your creative and brilliant! Very well done!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A bold and trusted statment of extreme society and it's members, well written, great read.

[Aidz]

better than a moonwalk, come now thats a bold statement ;)

Once again kewl write Rene

[brenda]

i like it ! great write !:)

[Maya Storm]

Everything you write sounds like a rap or a song... it's a pretty neat talent to have.

"the darkest temple
with a captured soul,"

why do I interpret this as a religion taking the soul of the average man... well I could be wrong. loved it none the less

[light and ashes]

I really love this poem!!! Fantastic! I love the "marriage of words is what suits me best." what a wonderful way of describing it. "I am the medicine man who will dance to the spirits and make it rain." If I wrote everything I loved about this it would be a whole paragraph! So I am just going to say awesome job :]

[joshua deathdealer]

I love it Rene. "made for the skies"!! Excellent work.

[Kenneth The Poet]

You are the medicine man for sure. Nice work all around.