Blazed and confused

A man, blazed out of his mind wanders around town, staring at s**t

The girl near him was a friendly face in a crowd of cruel hard ones that rushed by him, him being Rigel, named after a big star, he was far from that. He pulled out his pipe and lit it, smoke slowly rising into the air, than being pulled into his lungs, he held the smoke in, watching the girls face turn from one of friendliness to a cold hard one. He blew the smoke in the lady's face and continued walking.

The stained glass of the church cast beautiful multicolored shadows onto the pews, Rigel wasn't praying, just looking at the rainbow spectrums surrounding polygonal saints that stared down on him with the same disapproving looks as the people who walked by him, a man sat next to him, "something bothering you my son?" Rigel continued watching the saints, "why do they hate me so, Father?" The priest tugged at his collar uncomfortably, " they do not hate my son." Rigel rose off the pews and left.

Rigel placed his prisms and plastic sheets on the counter and payed the clerk, he proceeded to place them into his glasses, forming a constant prism spectrum effect, his whole landscape turned from harsh city to a spectral wonderland of brilliant color.

The sun was flanked by rainbow colors like bodyguards, Rigel thought to challenge the sun and his guards in a drugged haze but quickly decided against it, the sun was the only happy thing, shining upon the city.

Rigel sat quietly on an overlook, watching the sun dip below the horizon, flanked by its rainbow bodyguards, Rigel waved goodbye to it, he could've sworn it waved back. That night would be good, he could tell, when the sun waved back at you that was a sign, now he gazed at multicolored neon, the night's sun.

Reviews

[Ezequiel Esquibal]

Don't know if you're looking for a review of your grammar, but this piece is filled with run-on sentences. Remember that each sentence should only have one subject and verb! This will really help make your writing more enjoyable to read. It'll establish a more reasonable pace for the reader to read. Google how to fix this if you need to!

Other than that, the premise seems interesting and you do a nice job of describing things. But what's happening here? Why? Who are these people? Why should I care about Rigel? Why is this story one that should be told?

Think about your audience and try to engage them. Nothing actually happened in this story. It feels more like an intro than a complete piece, so knock yourself out fleshing it out!

[Reuben]

Thank you for the critiques, yes my grammar is very bad, I agree with this. This piece actually was kind of an experiment to see who liked it, ill try to work on this a bit, again thank you for the critiques/review.

[Ezequiel Esquibal]

No problem! Keep at it!