Heartbeat's Crescendo

I was in the 'zone' for this one...

 

I thought my life would last.

Maybe I asked the wrong question,

Or asked for the wrong answer,

But forever and a day is too long.

 

After life, there is Life itself,

I should have nothing to worry about.

But maybe I do.  With no fear of death,

There is no love of life.

 

I gaze at my mirror,

The reflection showing my true self;

Everything the reverse of what,

Everyone else can see.

 

My heartbeat’s the music only I can hear,

My song’s crescendo has already passed,

For years, it has played, and never will it end,

Long after my heartbeat will be forgot.

 

Thinking about it, I realise,

All I can leave behind is a footprint,

On where and who I walked this Earth,

If I don’t move, I will fade from memory.

 

My youth was wasted, wanting to be older,

Rest of my life, wishing I was younger,

Regret, Sorrow, what I did and didn’t,

I wish we knew mistakes before we learnt from them.

 

Upon the street, I am just an additional face,

Another member of another mass,

How to be different, but not crazy?

How to be seen, but not judged?

 

So many questions, no time for answers,

I ignored my precious time, trying to be different.

Maybe I asked the wrong question,

But forever and a day is too long.

Reviews

[Courtney]

HOLY CRAP! lol. this one is amazing! i LOVE it. i love the stanza about seeing yourself differently than everyone else does. i feel like you read my mind on that one (with better words ha!). I also love the imagery about the footprint and how you must move or you'll fade from memory. This one really hit home with me! GREAT WRITE!!!

[Brenda Sue]

Very well written. I loved it. Wonderfully penned. Great job.

[Yaooooooo]

Overall a good read, keep up the good work and feel free to send me a request when ever..
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[Brandon Lee Burton]

wow

[Raef C. Boylan]

"My youth was wasted, wanting to be older,
Rest of my life, wishing I was younger," - how very true; you summarise the regret that many experience here.


"Upon the street, I am just an additional face,
Another member of another mass,
How to be different, but not crazy?
How to be seen, but not judged?" - this was my favourite stanza; it is hard finding the balance between being ignored and being paid too much [negative] attention.

Within this piece, you make some good points and pose some important questions.
Well done. Thanks for posting this.

[Sarah S.]

There's a lot I liked about this poem. It's filled with short thoughtful phrases, my favorite being:

If I don't move, I will fade from memory.

well done!

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

This is a great one.. regrets and longings.. i love the format and images .. this was well 'pumped out'..
I enjoyed each verse. Especially the last one.

Chloe
xoxo

[Dezaraye]

I love your perspective and insight in this piece. Each line made me stop and think for a moment. Really awesome write.

[TL Boehm]

wow - With no fear of death,

There is no love of life.

I never looked at it this way - having always struggled with the FEAR...
A wonderful introspective write. Lucid and eloquent.

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

I love this piece. A wonderful write. I especially like the lines -

My youth was wasted, wanting to be older,
Rest of my life, wishing I was younger

A truely inspritional piece. Great Write!!!!

[Rion]

I'll quickly make mention of the slight insight my english teacher made.
He really loved the 'After life, there is life itself' because he did but read it as 'Afterlife' as well. He thought this was quite clever, I thought it was quite flukey, ha ha.