Lost in Reason

Sometimes we're our own worst enemies

Truth be told

The air is now so cold

For my mind has gone

To become a pawn

Lost in useless reason

Oh! for solely having committed treason

Against thine own soul

Reviews

[Recklesseyes]

Wow! Treason against the soul? That's deep. Love it. Would like a line about the conflict of the heart perhaps? Only because you mention the mind overruling the heart in your explanation. How bout this...

Truth be told
The air is now so cold...
A heart beat grows old
For my mind has gone!

Just a thought. Love it the way it is though.

[Emily B]

Reason is so useless most of the time anyway. Nothing wrong with short poems. . . I've heard that brevity is the soul of wit. I like the idea that clever might come in small containers.

[Scott]

that was rlly good, amazing rlly... i can rlly feel how u felt...

[Jillian Alexis]

I really enjoyed reading this poem. Even though it did not contain very many words, it said so much. Beautiful, and excellently penned. I will be reading more of your' work...Hugz...Jillian

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I can sure relate to this. The "civil war" within, eh. Love the way you say you are "lost" in reason. Pretty much how I feel about it, too... that it doesn't always steer us the right way. Thanks for sharing!

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Treason against thine own soul.. am guilty of such I feel.
I like the shortness , it says it all right there .. to me it is perfect.

Peace

[Windsong]

I like it, but it's really short. Add on por favor!