AGAINST ALL ODDS

Kiss me, scars and all

Catch me when I fall,

hold me when I cry;

love me 'til I die.

 

When tears roll

down my face,

whatever caused them

show me grace.

 

Against all odds,

we'll make it through

'cause you love me

and I love you!

 

© 2015 Suzanna Jayne Mullins

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I really like your expression of love despite blemishes (who wouldn't be blessed to share such acceptance?) . . . your writing is clear & meaningful . . . your rhymes are not following a regular pattern, but feel "natural" & not "forced" (picking a word to get a rhyme when it doesn't really fit the message).

I feel this message is a little bit skimpy, tho. I think this idea could be expanded with more examples of what this kind of loving acceptance looks & feels like. "Hold me when I cry" and "Tears roll down my face" and "against all odds" are cliché (way over-used) ways of describing love . . . your message could be stronger if you picked more original ways to show it.

[SJ Mullins]

Thank you very much for your critique. That is why I am here to get honest feedback. I want to be the best writer I can be. As soon as I have the time, I will edit using your wonderful suggestions.

[Gee]

Love the last verse as it sums up true love to a tee, well, the whole poem does. Sweet

[SJ Mullins]

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment and for your kind words. :)

[Gee]

Nae problem, a pleasure

[Coyote Poetry]

Perfect use of words. To adore the scars of your love. Honored place to know and share with another. I enjoyed your poetry. Real life, honest and the tone of truth. Thank you Suzanna for sharing your amazing poetry.
Coyote

[SJ Mullins]

Thank you. You are very kind. It makes me happy to know you are enjoying it. I have much more to post as I have the time. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I look forward to reading more and you are welcome.