Light Years

miss you Jean-Pierre

Oh Rocket Man we've come so far
Strapped right on in your fancy car
We left the moon by way of stars
Treated them all like cosmic bars

Perched on the stool to my left
one of those alien things
Keeps trying to impress me
with all of his Saturn rings
Feelers all over my a*s
Now you know that just ain't right
Once again we'll be thrown out
'cause there's gonna be a fight

Oh Rocket Man we're on our way
Where we'll end up no-one can say
Just traveling on come what may
Children set loose to run and play

I write these memories down
of the times that we once knew
Imaginations ran wild
Thoughts combined that changed and grew
On Mars I sit and listen
for the old, familiar sound
Of those turbo twin engines
telling me you're still around

Oh Rocket man what fun we had
You know I don't mean to be bad
Souped up drawing on a sketch pad
With parts overblown just a tad

Reviews

[Ken Simm.]

No matter how much we spread out. No matter how much technology improves our lives and lets us do things hitherto undreamed of; you still get some slob with feelers trying for a quick grope.
Humour with pathos. This I like.

[Rogue]

Hahahahaha
This was written for a good friend of mine (just a friend, but a great one actually). Good to see you, Ken and thank you. :)

[Michy]

Hey, I really like this poem. It's really poignant and has a lot of depth to it. Well done :)

[Rogue]

Thank you for the kind words here. :)

[quinfinn]

rocket man suggests fierce intensity and speed...kinda interesting to ponder...a bar is no place to take a date unless you are both very comfortable with people and their drunken behavior....sometimes things get out of hand. clever write.

[Rogue]

Thank you, Quinn. Although in this case, "Rocket Man" and I are just good friends. :)

[quinfinn]

always good to have a friend like that.....you are welcome!

[Tate Morgan]

Absolute power corrupts absolutely doesnt it . Well on behalf of the men We are sorry as a matter of fact we are the sorriest of the lot lol

[Rogue]

-grin-
Are you saying I corrupted him or he corrupted me? Maybe we just corrupted each other as we threw it into hyperdrive. :)

Thanks, Tate. :)

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

Here i am----
this is me---
there is no one else on Mars I'll ever be
here we are.. this is you
where all your alien-dreams come true

[Rogue]

Hahahahaha
You come bearing gifts of smiles. Thank you. :)

[shivohumsohum]

Beware of these greenies...they can be meanies
we made them as our android-bio techs to look over
but they play with folks sentiments.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

I make everyone smile Rogue...:)

and Holy one...we still revere thee

[Rogue]

Your idolness are you saying he has been preprogrammed to flatter? Flowers.. Chocolates.. Promises he doesn't intend to keep?

Smiling is always a good thing, you. :)

[Sami Khalil]

Oh, holy one, where is your jolly one ( your wife ) for I have good tickets on air force
one or if you prefer space odyssey one...Lol

[Rogue]

It's all about being the "one"
In "oneness" we find clarity.

-grin-

[Sami Khalil]

True , true , true...:)

[Sami Khalil]

"Oh Rocket Man we've come so far
Strapped right on in your fancy car
We left the moon by way of stars
Treated them all like cosmic bars ."
The beginning stanza is out of this world perhaps from Venus and the whole poem landed on Mars. An elegant write...:)
By the way I like the title too ...:)

[Rogue]

Thanks, Sami. You have insight into this piece, so you know. I worried maybe it was clunky by changing the tempo of rhyme back and forth. But then I remembered, he always likes my poetry because he feels it's original and creative and my voice. So, for him.. I let it be. ;)

[Sami Khalil]

Original is the best and the natural...You know it...Good stuff...:)

[Rogue]

Thank you. :)

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...Any time...:)