Afterthought

Prose/Experimental

As the day fades and the mind slows
suddenly I am conjured up again.
Were you bored?
Maybe lonely?
Did you just need to feel a touch?
Know that someone cares?
In the bright light of morning I am discarded
behind a million other things that take precedence.
Where do I fit in here?
What is my worth?
Eventually you'll get to me, right?
Number 999 on the 'to do' list?

Just another afterthought..

Reviews

[SteveB]

Ouch! The grim realization of the fact that we are merely bit players, often uncreditied, in the movies of other's lives. A painfiul realization.
This is open to so many interpretations and I for one love that in a poem. It could be the lover on the side, it could be the friend who is rarely called, it could be any one of a million people.
Well structured, well thought out and well written. Thank you for sharing this.

[Rogue]

Glad you found some ways to identify with this one, Steve. Thank you for the lovely and kind review here. I appreciate it (not sure if I deserve it) but I do appreciate it. :)

[Vile]

I think you captured this well, the feeling of being 2nd best, or subpar. It is something I think we can all relate to. Well done. :D

[Rogue]

Thank you kindly, sir. :)

[Cool Handless Luke]

I heave definitely felt this way and am sure I have made others feel the same to be honest. I tend to think it is more than an afterthought that brings them back to me though - they are usually after something - lol. Never hear from my daughter until she needs something type of thing. Nice "experiment" rogue.

[Rogue]

Thank you. I have one of those daughters too. I figure someday she'll realize the word "grown-up" is not just about one's age. :)

[Chris]

Life's illusions I recall...

so many are afterthoughts... and let themselves be.

[Rogue]

I am learning to really communicate these things. It is amazing how much one is willing to show they care, when they know. Thank you, Chris. -smile-

[Shaun Payton]

Definitely is not a welcoming wanted feeling.its a used empty feelng. Thats why Poetry is my love now.

[Rogue]

Good to see you, Shaun. :)
Thank you for your thoughts.

[Shaun Payton]

Well good to see you too Rogue.:) you are welcome.

[Rita L. Sev]

It is horrible to feel that we are always put last; love should never be this way. Great write, Rogue!

[Rogue]

Thank you, Rita. That is very kind of you to say. :)

[emmajoy]

Oh my.. how many of us feel like that at times but, can't put the hopelessness in such a concise yet moving way. It's hard to sit in shadows, just waiting .. harder still to walk away with a little pride remaining. A superbly etched picture of how life can sometimes be. Thank you.

[Rogue]

Thank you, Emma for both the thoughts and lovely review. :)

[Will Neill]

Rogue, its always a pleasure to read your poetry and stories, what a terrible feeling it can be to think that we are an after thought-tenderly from the heart. Good work.
Will

[Rogue]

Thank you, Will. I enjoyed reading your thoughts on this one. :)

[ayosonolowo]

Switch of word write now
nice written indeed

[Rogue]

Thank you. :)

[quinfinn]

you can't always be your significant other's number one, but , ideally, it would be fitting in a good relationship. if i play second fiddle long enough i leave the orchestra and find another band to play with. nicely penned, Rogue.

[Rogue]

As the one person who truly knows and understands, I thank you for this, Quinn. It was my mood as of yesterday. Today, the sun has returned. And tomorrow... Is another day?

[quinfinn]

yes, Scarlett, after all, tomorrow is another day!