At An End.

Times ticking,

You're packing,

I'm crying,

Worlds ending.

We're fighting,

Your shouting,

I'm hitting,

Your breaking.

I'm a mess,

Your red with anger,

I'm begging,

Your ignoring.

What went wrong?
We used to be so happy,

We used to be together,

And now we're completely over. 

Your walking out the door,

I'm begging on my knees,

You're shouting I'm done with you,

And now our story's at an end. 

Author's Note

This happens a lot with couples, I've never had it happen with me, but when I was reading my friends Poem, she inspired me to write this. Be brutally honest with the reviews please! :)

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I really like this... especially the ending, nice story of the situation... really good write.

[Marie Harrison]

Endings are swift and blunt sometimes.
But looking backwards
it's for the best often.
Why drag out something painful?
Find closure and move on.

[Chris]

Honesty isn't brutal... its thought-full.

Spell check finds mispelled words, not wrong ones; hence, that is part of what bites so many people and makes English a very difficult language to master. Making a work reflect a personal ownership or not is an author's choice - using possessives beyond mere pronouns takes consideration. Worlds - plural or world - singular or world's - singular possessive or worlds' - plural and possessive each have a draw and present a choice. But 'tis the Author's choice - not anyone else's.

Last Stanza "Your" is ownership - "You're" is action

I listened because it was worth hearing.
Nicely done.

Chris

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Very relatable, captured how love starts and can end up, and how or why it happens, can be hard to grasp or take and understand, really good read and love the shrt sentences build up :)