Wilting Rose

Something like this cant be described just interpreted

 

Wilting Rose

A tear drops from my eye as another petal falls
The man who used to water me and who kept me alive has left me here to die.
Its cold and dry out here away from the window where i lied
Im dying i scream for help as another petal falls to the ground.

Theres so little of me left now
I dont believe theres any hope that i will survive
In this, this dry and cold place where he has left me
here i shall die alone

Author's Note

Just let me know what you feel about this poem.

Reviews

[Lyra H]

Good job!

[Tiffany]

So sad. Beautifully crafted. I love it. The words string together like a neclace. (I know bad metaphor)

[Jacquelene Vanessa More..]

this poem is heart felt. in the first stanza i could do with some shortening of the 2 line, the overall gist.
in stanza two also the 2 line seems repatative with the emotions flowing throughout the poem. though i do like this piece it's very tragic and it paints a lovely deep portrait in my mind.

[Legion]

Very sad and desolate. A good comparison on a love that has died as well. Well written.