Dead To Me

Lifeless
soulless pits
numb to this
biting lips
unable to let it pass
something rash
cool anger
mellow harm
fainting roar
words die here
thoughts run with wicked wishes
as death lays kisses
I won't miss this
soft whispers
my will fails to exert
to a world beyond
and I am gone

Reviews

[Sapphire Balasquez]

woah. I do like the pungent-ness of this poem! it's very riveting! i would think about extending it maybe, I mean it's all in the eye of the beholder and how you like to write your poems but it's very abstract and doesn't make a whole lot of sense, besides looking at the title. It's a very good dark feeling, but it almost seems a little fluffy and your purpose isn't quite clear. It's good though, has very good rhythm! ^^