An Advisory note to Parasuicidals,perhaps or what should i call this poem

I told him

I find it ridiculous

when people kill themselves

because they are sad.

I'm more inclined to do so

when i'm happiest,

in that perfect of perfectest moments

when you suddenly realise

that stars are never going to shine

brighter than they are shining now,

grass will never be greener,

December trees will never probe deeper into skies

and you will never look prettier,

more self satieted,complete or contented.

The kind of moment when you

want everything to be snowed in the niche of time

smiling,in a perfect say cheese pose.

A minute conjured by the huge hugeness

of universe for you and you only

when things abruptly start making you believe

that the world will end with a bang,

a rather loud one,not a whimper.

Eliot, babe, you were wrong,

yes, you were.  

Author's Note

I'm totally ''past oven'' so this isn't literal...

Reviews

[OT]

still one of my favourites - the concept behind it - so clever - (p.s. love the "past oven" note ha!)

[Tim]

I can understand the idea behind it. Go out with a bang! I guess I would agree with Narnie. The trick is to make many happy moments into a lifetime endeavor. It makes me wonder what eliot would say if he could read your thoughts. ha Great writing as always.

[.]

. brilliantly written ... i've never experienced this emotion though ... not ever ... i've only experienced a debilitating sadness ... and at least to me ... it doesn't seem ridiculous at all ... it's a burden that is absolutely overwhelming and dangerous ...

[Jibey]

Maybe it explains 'le petit mort'

[paul]

great ideas here.
'trees probe skies' - brilliant !! and perfectly placed in the poem.

[Narnie]

The trick is to turn that perfect moment into a lifetime of perfect moments, even if imperfection tries to nudge in, you just have to remember to look up and its all there again. Great power in the way you have laid out these words... I wonder if this was a single stream thought that just rushed out? If so, then it suits you.

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

This is something to really consider, fantastically conveyed with great understanding and passion.

[Robin]

I will make it three ~ Brilliant , your poetic perspective shines once again ~

[Emily B]

those tall moments are the hardest to let go of, I agree with you, on the darkest days I was in no danger to myself, but that perfect moment, that moment I could end it all and never regret it

you are a brilliant poetess

[OT]

brilliant!! I love the idea behind it - when you've reached the pinnacle of happiness - that's the true sadness as once you've got it - what's left? brilliant! a favourite!!1