She Never Wanted This

She (never) wanted this

A curse

Because (s)he (never) loved this

She was (never) tired of these games he played

He was invincible

~S.S.A.F.

Reviews

[Rahul Chhabra]

The way you portrayed the differences between him and her is absolutely beautiful. It give a very elegant look to the poem and forces the reader to go through it once again and hence, he is able to savour the subtleties that you have incorporated in the verse. The choice of words displays your maturity perfectly. The title just pulls the reader to dive in and experience the emotions that went into writing this poem. Also the central idea of the poem is touching by itself. The manner in which he plays all those games and just always wins, is invincible and she has to play these games against her wish and lose is something which the reader envisions and it give a whole new touch to poetry. You seem to be a great observer. And only a great observer can end up being an excellent poet or writer in general Writing two versions of the poem in just one expresses how as humans, we all are somewhere in between black and white, the shades of grey. That no extreme can show the true nature of humans and it takes those intermediate states to be able to picture the true nature of home sapiens, their emotions, their feelings and their responses. I wish to read more of your work. Hope you have written more. I would recommend you to begin writing on a whole new scale and let it help and release you. You can escape of all your fears, all your miseries and all your sorrows by writing. So don't stop ever and continue to write more and more. God bless you good health and well-being. All the best..! Do well..! Hope I get to read your first novel where you have expressed your self more elaborately and in more detail. Best of luck..!!

[~S.S.A.F.]

Thank you very much ^-^
I'm so glade that you enjoyed it. This was more of an experiment for me to pin out two different views to the same situation, much like what we as human beings experience every day. I have yet to meet two people with the exact same view on the same situation as i'm sure you might have already known and/or experienced already. it reminds me of the writings of Shakespeare who uses different views by each character he adds to the plot, to display the main plot of a story. So thank you very much for the encouragement to write and ill be sure to test out more of these types of poems and story's for you to read and enjoy. ^-^
~S.S.A.F.

[Rahul Chhabra]

You are welcome. If you have some time to spare, do review my writing too.

[~S.S.A.F.]

i would love to review your writing ^-^