SECOND LOVE

You ask me to be your second love

Smugly my heart is pondering for my first one

I’m not avowed but can’t leave you

Because my heart is thinking for none;

 

From that time to this

My heart is floating and sinking

Though I am a girl too

I can feel your girlfriend’s thinking;

 

Your succinct maze of words

Being scorn on rapt: I’m in confusion

In state of intoxicate, swimming on clouds

Disdain or accept this transgression;

 

It is chicanery or my vague

But your second love is my first love.  

 

By Saddam Husen

©saddamhusen2015 

Reviews

[MomzillaNC]

The imagery and word choice aptly paints a word picture so the longing and love and the twist of pain in the relationship you portray. Your poetry and expression are improving.

[nazia]

The way you express the dilemma is fantastic Saddam.

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear.....

[prajakta]

perfect one...:)u used beautiful words!loved it:)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear friend..

[Gurleen Saluja]

Amazing work, well used vocab. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Saddam]

Thank you dear...

[Lyndy]

Nice poem amazingly written! Keep up the good work. :D

[Saddam]

Thank you dear for this love.

[Nikolean]

I like how you convey the feelings, and the older writing style of yours, however, I feel some breaks in the flow. Besides the minor flow breaks, it's well written

[Saddam]

Thank you friend...

[Brittany Zedalis]

I've been reading your poetry for quite some time now, and you are definitely improving. Great work.

[Saddam]

Thank you dear poet.

[Brittany Zedalis]

You're welcome! :)

[Blue]

What wonderful twist! I didn't see it coming. Your poems have improved, Saddam.

[Saddam]

Wow.. that's wonderful words. Thank you so much dear.

[Jeyanthi]

Ouch! the word transgression hurts....
its like enigma to me, neatly expanding more of one's dilemma.. how clever you are. :D
really awesome!!!:)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear for this lovely comment.

[Ana B.]

Love the secret longing in it, and the beautiful, sometimes, sad emotions....a marvellous write dear poet :)

[Saddam]

Thank you so much dear poet.