PAINFUL LOVE - I

 

boy

 

I

O dear! O dear!

Come near; come near!

Why are you going far mile?

My heart is so fragile!

How can you leave me in crematorium?

After, my life’s hope is minimum

You treat me like a thing of consume

Your rudeness for me is queer.

 

II

O dear! O dear!

Come near; come near!

I think which days promises

Your, to live all days long and happiness

I always said " “I accept”

But currently you say " “it’s except”

Then I have no any expect

Even dead fear.

 

III

O dear! O dear!

Why you go far for ever.

The world is, for me too, curse

I am too near to death course

This is off bear

Shortly people will took bier

My feelings is, for you, not differ

In heaven we’ll be always near.

Reviews

[CA Anurag Sharma]

"In heaven we'll always be near".... this I believe is a lie which we say to ourselves... no one has seen heaven or hell....even I feel this for the people I miss in my life.... we all are alike.... the emotions rule us... but a nice work this one....

[Saddam]

Yea! you are right bro... thank you so much dear friend.

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is most excellent my friend.Well enjoyed by me it was :)

[Saddam]

thank you dear friend...

[Alicia Huntley]

This is so deep and painful. Thank you for writing these words down and sharing. You have a gift for expression.

[Saddam]

thank you very much dear poet....I am very glad.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[Julie Spade]

The melody and flow is extremely soothing to the mind in a way, if that makes any sense... I love the way you expressed your personal feelings through this poem like you always do! The rhyming is genius as well, the last line is beautiful , great conclusion! Thank You for showing us your talent

[Saddam]

your review give me a happy smile...and i read your review two or three times. Thank you very much dear friend.

[Faceless Poet]

the monster hears a melody upon reading this,
it's a beauty, oh dear! oh dear!
love is but a whisper,
can't hear, not near, please come near.

Love is much complicated as it seems to be.

[Saddam]

thank you dear friend....Why you calling yourself 'monster' though you have a sweet heart.

[Faceless Poet]

the monster is just near, become one as we leer. it just a matter on how we stir, life is nothing but darker fear. the monster thank thee...

[Saddam]

hahaha....very nice of you, sir. thanks.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A very old world feel to this piece and surprising finish, well done, good read.

[Saddam]

thank you dear friend.

[MsJewel]

Your feelings are so beautifully expressed my friend... I love the last line..
in heaven we'll always be near...

:) Julie

[Saddam]

thank you dear poet. you are a such sweet.

[Shaquana Adams]

Very nicely penned!

My feelings is, for you, not differ
In heaven we’ll be always near

Favorite lines :)

[Saddam]

thank you dear poet. you are so sweet.

[Penny]

Nyc poem. I can truly understand the feeling of longingness in it. Well done.

[Saddam]

thank you dear friend.

[Penny]

Ur welcome