Did it all wrong

I cheated and came clean.

I know I hurt you, tore you into pieces
But I would die without your kisses
Nothing's ever right, everything is wrong
Maybe I should stop listening to stupid love songs
You want to leave me, I know I can feel it
You didn't, and I can't believe it.
But now, what will you do to make me jealous?
It's running through your veins, all that malice.
You said it aloud for the whole world to see
Or are you doing this just to show me?
What I did is unforgiveable, without a doubt
But how long will you stay? I'm scared to count.
Something tells me you listen to your friends,
Listen to them when they say "It's time to end."
Without you I would die, wanna know how?
A simple form of suicide, it'll only hurt for now.
You said you forgave me, that it's all okay
Somethings tells me things will come out into play.
I can't live without you, it'd be so damn hard
But I know I left you crying, and scarred.
Nothing I do is right, yet you love me so
These are the days I hate myself, and want to let go.
You're the reason I wake up day to day
Open my eyes just to hear you say "hey"
You brighten my life, you're my angel
You're my everything, f**k all other labels.
But something tells me we're drifting,
I wont let you go, not without kicking.
I'll always love you, no matter what
Though, I'm waiting to be called a s**t.
But I'm the one who did it wrong,
For you I'll bleed, hopefully not for long.
I love you always, never forget that
And to you, I tip my hat.

Reviews

[Tenten]

ouch, oh hun i feel it, its a bit fast pace and going out all, the emotion carrys it through and its honest to what you're saying.

[After the Blackbird Sin..]

The poem read kind of sing-songy with the rhyme scheme. I felt it was strong on emotion, but weak on imagery.