why you not listen me

I can see you.

How you look so sweet,

We laid by each other's side.

Your eye's do smile,

Trying to tell me,

The feeling of life.

We do realize the big distance,

Between us every time.

This is the reality,

How we both remain

With the truth of life.

When you sleep in full joy of life,

I feel happy beside you in life.

My eyes are in waiting.

I feel you by heart,

In happy moments every time.

In Your sleepy eyes

Still give me a smile.

How sweet they make you,

I want to thank our God every time.

You are my sweetest,

When you look at me,

It is so nice every time.

Now I am going to sleep,

With you beside my side.

You should promise,

No more than five kisses,

One at a time.

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Samparks,sam,
We all seek life. Love and caring bring affirmation. Your poem is a cry for being held important and needed. "Still give me a smile." That one line is such a beautiufl thing. We all need to know we are loved. Beautifully done................Kathy

[Elizabeth J. Gelinger]

Sweet poem, I especially enjoyed the ending of it.

[T. Edana Talbott]

Very sweet poem, though you might not want to change the title to "Why don't you listen to me?"

[LoN]

A couple small language issues that interrupt the flow of the poem. But otherwise, a great writing style.
Beautiful poem!

[Akshita]

You really write beautiful poems and I really love reading them!

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Very beautiful and touching

[Ayushi Beura]

"Your eye's do smile,
Trying to tell me,
The feeling of life."
lovely lines...i enjoyed reading your poem