Cobra

y'know... kickin' around informal thoughts and labeling it poetry

Jazz-laden, smokey, all alone,

I lean against the wall,

Dreaming of none-but-you,

In all the world,

No matter where I took to,

How could I forget?

I shake my gin,

Ice rattlin' 'gainst the glass,

Take it in to beg my heart,

'Stop prodding, let it be', 

I bite my lip,

     Cobra in a sealed box,

Breathing in the company,

Notes enslave the keys,

I draw them in with ease,

The saxophone relates to me,

His loneness bitter,

My smirk turns to a frown,

As I try to wash you down,

Lights flicker as I shut my eyes,

And your heart's here with me.

Author's Note

F.

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

Jazz, gin, bitterness...welcome to my world. Oh, except replace Jazz with speed metal and you're there. *wink* I like your style. The idea of taking in the gin to quiet the heart; so familiar to so many of us (I am certain...we creative types like a little bevvie now, don't we?) And again, the image of washing him down. I am mainly a novelist, but I appreciate good poetry, and this, absolutely, is good poetry.

[Alexandria Reece]

Aye aye miss, thank you so much for the kind review! :D

[John Fitzgerald]

Now I see you as more of a blues girl than a jazz girl. Still jazz or not, you are like my favourite living poet! :) may the light in your heart always flicker!

[Alexandria Reece]

May your breath e'er be the wind on my flame.

[Kenneth The Poet]

So hazy, feels like the speakeasy across the river when it is wet, while the folks in the dry city remain parched.

[Alexandria Reece]

Hell yeah!

[BIIKAY]

this is a great poem sweety! I love the title it made me want to read it!

[Deeper La'jik]

Can't stop reading your poems. Iit's funny because i'm into electronic. but your writing moves me

[Alexandria Reece]

Wow! Thank you so much!! It means a lot, especially if it's not usually what you're into! :D

[Kristallo]

The saxophone does have a bitter ring of isolation to it's melody, doesn't it? Keen observation. I love the setting you've laid out here, I wrote one once in a similar place. The placid thoughts you've splashed onto your page are enlightening and breathy, sensual and poignant. Very sweetly done, miss poet. As always, I found this to be enthralling and magnificent.

[Alexandria Reece]

You are always too kind! It is wondrous having encouragement from the Queen of Poetry herself, you remain my favourite and I have set aside some time later to sit and enjoy your work with a little tea. I would love a suggestion of what sort of tea you think I should drink while doing this, recommend any sort... I'm sure I have it. I know you're fond of coffee, perhaps I should drink that instead? :)

[Kristallo]

I always loved chai tea best. :) Green tea or peppermint is good for an evening reading session, also. And you flatter me! So sweet. Thank you.

[Alexandria Reece]

We must be in sync, I made green tea and then Moroccan mint with clover honey and now I will make some chai upon your suggestion! :) With milk a think... and oh, you're beyond welcome. I just adore your ability.

[Michael G.]

This is an excellent work, Alexandria. I've been in a lot of low lit dives where the only way you could find your way was to listen to where the music was coming from (The stage) and where the ice chinked. The bar.)
You made me feel it all. Nice write.
Poetry? I would absolutely call it poetry... and music to my ears.

[Alexandria Reece]

Michael, I am so glad you found this pleasing and musical! It is a great honour to have done so! I am glad to know you've been to a similar place and could relate that to the words here a bit, that's really excellent!! I thank you for your kindness!

[~]

Have you been reading my diary? :) You are a woman after my own heart, Alexandria. How I love those smoke filled bars, a cool glass of Gin, and jazz playing somewhere in the distance. You know, kicking around informal thoughts and labeling it poetry is pretty much my bread and butter. I don't know what is regarded as "poetry" these days because my soul is still stuck in the last century, but this, my friend, is pure magic to me. Obviously, it speaks to me and I adore it. I think I will move it into my vault so I can read it one of those smoke filled nights.

[Alexandria Reece]

Y'know, I broke in last night and read a little bit.. hope you don't mind ;D

Thank you so much for the encouragement and sharing our similarities, it always makes me smile to know we are alike. :)