Under The Rose Trellis
A Poem by
Sunflower/Sara Kendrick
Choka, the longest of Japanese Haiku type poem...
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Running Pale Pink Rose
On the trellis grows_soft scent
Wafts on morning air
Under rose trellis
You steal a kiss__Oh! Blissful
Lips that taste of rose
© 2010 Sunflower/Sara Kendrick
Author's Note
Choka, written in response to competition that said leave me breathless..
Featured Review
There is something special about a rose, a kiss, and a poem...
They are all rather "minuscule" in the grand scheme of things. Yet, they all have the power to change this world into a better place...
Much like you Sara as an author... Making the world a better place.
Lovely!
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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That was so sweet and the thought could be TASTED ON THE END OF MY TONGUE
Posted 13 Years Ago
That was so sweet and the thought could be TASTED ON THE END OF MY TONGUE
Nice! I love the vivid picture you paint with your well chosen words.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Nice! I love the vivid picture you paint with your well chosen words.
This was very lovely.
The ending was so unique and very amazing!
Posted 13 Years Ago
This was very lovely.
The ending was so unique and very amazing!
So much meant in so few words .. beautiful, serene, charming, memorable.
Posted 13 Years Ago
So much meant in so few words .. beautiful, serene, charming, memorable.
pretty and pink... so gentle and simple. inspired. :)
Posted 13 Years Ago
pretty and pink... so gentle and simple. inspired. :)
You know I haven't written much in the form of Haiku or Senryu, but I enjoy the power that when written well they posses in such little diction. You have wrote a great verse full of passion and awe in the sight of love.
Great Write!
RLG,
Tommy
Posted 13 Years Ago
You know I haven't written much in the form of Haiku or Senryu, but I enjoy the power that when written well they posses in such little diction. You have wrote a great verse full of passion and awe in the sight of love.
Great Write!
RLG,
Tommy
Such a mesmerizing use of vocab, it doesn't fail to create a sensation. Wow, well done!
Posted 13 Years Ago
Such a mesmerizing use of vocab, it doesn't fail to create a sensation. Wow, well done!
"The miniscule is very important.." indeed
This poem shows the truth in your statement.
A joy of life compacted..but highly visual
in six short lines..
enjoyed
Posted 13 Years Ago
"The miniscule is very important.." indeed
This poem shows the truth in your statement.
A joy of life compacted..but highly visual
in six short lines..
enjoyed
This does sound very blissful and romantic. I give it an 100. I really enjoyed this beautiful poem!
Posted 13 Years Ago
This does sound very blissful and romantic. I give it an 100. I really enjoyed this beautiful poem!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Beautiful write. Just so picturesque. Nature is a beautiful topic and it also makes poetry beautiful.
Posted 13 Years Ago
Beautiful write. Just so picturesque. Nature is a beautiful topic and it also makes poetry beautiful.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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