Love To Immortalise

A different form of a sonnet

Strong storm blew the boat until it did strand

Upon rock_shore so very far away

Please my gentle lover give me your hand

For there is no way you would let me be prey

 

Row me and the boat ashore to assay

This beautiful place we will immortalise

No! We did not go down in depts to decay

Nor did guardian angel go down likewise

 

Didn't matter what nature will devise

Lived through shipwreck we will go down in fame

Through this somehow we will be eternise

The whole wide world will remember my name

 

Now this green isle we'll surely subdue

As our great love grows and somehow renew

Author's Note

Written for a contest..The rhyme scheme on this one is abab, bcbc, cdcd, ee..Line nine lets the reader that they made it ashore which is the turn from not really knowing..

Reviews

[cartera]

The language used is rather 18th Century, and it fots this romantic ode very well. One does not often see this older-style syntax and it is a pleasure, to me at any rate.
I am not sure about the word 'assay' here; I know that it has a meaning that fits, (just about) but I think it is pushing it a bit; I feel it does not fit in with the vocabulary of the narrator.
Otherwise,for me, well done.
ATB
Alex.

[Ladysue]

This was splendid. the last two line my favorite...beautifully done...

[An owl on the moon]

You create a love that is both journey and destination. Beautifully woven in the sonnet scheme.