'TIll she comes back again

It seems I'm a love-writer :D 'cause heres another song I would like to share to you. And this time, I'm adding the music!! Hope you like it :)

A coffee,

such a perfect excuse,
for talking
to someone you dont know,
and realize
what you have just done,
is impressive
'cause you have just talked
to a girl.

It's funny
to see how things can change
if youre positive.
To give a smile to her
expecting,
she might realize what you're trying:
bring up her attention, to you.

Oh....
She stands there behind the till.
And I saw her pretty face,
and I heard her gentle voice.
And she asks what i'd like to have.
But I couldn't do anything, but to look her pretty eyes.
And I wonder what she might think,
if I come back here again.
And I wonder what's her name,
I guess I have to wait again,
till she comes back again
till she comes back again...
 

Author's Note

And here is the audio

Please, sorry for the audio, I tried to do my best, even though I think it sounds quite well :D
Heres an update, unfortunatelly I didn't record second guitar this time, hope u like it:

Reviews

When I heard the song, and the lyrics, I was mesmerized, I know the story behind it, and it's so beautiful... I can only hear the notes, go from strong, into a silent mode, of longing, and yearning bliss, of seeing her again. It has a wonderful pathos, and really great meaning brother... thank you for sharing your romantic heart on your page, and on this site... I wished more were like you! true musicians, and feelers... well done.

- Elisa

[Anita Singh]

That was great. You have a nice and soothing voice. A nice poem too!

[Fernando Dardón]

thank you very much, you're so nice! :)

[Shaquana Adams]

This is very sweet. I imagined butterflies in his stomach at the thought of seeing her again. Great job!! :)

[Fernando Dardón]

Thank you very much, you're so nice :)
But the worse part is that you cant speak. cause you are so nervious! :s

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Very sweet!..
That glance... The admiration... The shyness...
It's truly charming!...
I like that you took the time to add your music....
Your talent shows through and through...
Nicely done, Bravo! :)

[Fernando Dardón]

So you heard the music? What do you think about ir?
Thanks for the review, you don't know how much I appreciate it :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It's my pleasure...a soothing flow...:)

[Pax]

wow - admirable talent. I always admire a singer, composer - because when you write and put music into it brings a new level into writing poetry. And this one is really beautiful, you don't need a chorus, just a beautiful melody and lyrical story then it becomes a hit.

beautiful song!

[Fernando Dardón]

Do you really think ir doesnt needs chorus? Well thats good todo unos,cause then ir would hace a whole different estructure. (Sorry the spelling mistakes , this tablet changes the words)thank u very much !!!

[Pax]

I came to listen to it again, i just love the intro music, it has a good and relaxing tune to it... for me, its fine as it is... no need chorus, though one thing I find that disturb the flow of the music is the second guitar tune in 1:08 -1:30, i am not sure in anyone but it didn't match well to me... but that's just my little observation, you don't need to change anything if you feel its fine. and You are very welcome...

[Fernando Dardón]

Please explain better, i fuese i dont understand. Let tell you i dont hace pro equipment, justo a cellphine(as microphone) which recording quality is amazingly nice, and a PDC with adobe soundbooth and thats all. When i hace money todo buey a real microphone i will edit ir again :D

[Fernando Dardón]

And thanks flor the comment con the intro! I must telll you i like this intro ver y mucho, im actually quite impressed that i came up with that arpegio :D

[Pax]

good job in everything by the way, the quality is really good... never mind my little observation, it doesn't much hinder your good voice and music. :)

[Amy Cowan]

Nice good work!!! I love the audio :D

[Fernando Dardón]

thank you very much!!! I appreciate it :)