The Magical

The dream of fate.

The Magical

Looking at the moonlight, he who bestowed the light upon the darkness. ''I want to say something to you.'' he said. 

''Tell me, don't be shy, what's with that face of yours?'' she said

 He made a sad face.  ''How can I say this to you?'' he said. 

''Why?'' she laughed, ''Please tell me. Don't let tomorrow take over you now,'' she told him seriously.

''I think your right...'' he replied lowly.

The girl interrupted, ''Oh! Goodbye Johnny! My mom is calling me! See ya!'' she said.

''A-Ah, I want to tell you that...Oh!'' he wanted to say something but he heard a reply saying, ''See ya!'' she replied with a fading voice.

''See ya Megs....'' he replied.

Johnny woke up with a sad face, he's now eighteen! He wants to confess something to her crush. ''Megs, I should have said that to you before, the last time we have seen each other. I'm sorry Megs, I didn't say a nice farewell to you.'' he told himself...he promised.

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Reviews

[Louie]

Cute short, but I am a fan of imagery, in stead of he made a sad face, try describing the face or the emotion behind it. It sounds like a good beginning as another reviewer mentioned but I think it may be a better ending to a story. I am going to read a couple more by you as well.

[PyroKitty24]

Very interesting. I think it's the start to something. It did need proofread though, and at times it got a bit confusing. Maybe try to space things out a little bit more (metaphorically) and add some details? I'd like to see it a bit longer too!

[Scyrus123]

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[Katie de Lavani]

It's cute! Nice and short. :)

[Scyrus123]

lol, its really a funny story isn't it?