WITHIN 1

I hate you!
I hate you!
I wonder why I fell for you.
I'm so numb not noticing that I am just a
dust on your shoulder!

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I like this part:
"I'm so numb not noticing that I am just a
dust on your shoulder!"
Nice one.

[AK]

Very nice. Just one thing-'just a dust' seems grammatically wrong. Try 'just dust' or 'just a speck of dust' or something like that.
Loved the poem!

[natzky]

heheh...dusts are noticeable...nice work..;)

[Emerald Seas]

Hurt has such a devastating effect on us. We've all been there!

[jennifer little]

great job and great short poem thanks for sharing this with me

[Coyote Poetry]

When we learn we mean little to another. Better to walk away with some needed wisdom. A very strong message in the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Amata Luna]

What a feeling. This is short but I can feel how much hurt you felt. A nice piece for a short one.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

The words of most of us, at times such as these, well done, good read